blackwings_angel

yeah i was about to say the same thing as Misspriss but she beat me to it. Good job, you should write more poetry

no offnese Dan but this REALLY isn't good. Start over and kill teh rhymes your not a gangster.

I relally liked it. But I noticed towards teh end you seemed to lose some of your rhtym. Then in the last stanza you got it back. Way to go ...

I love eragon. Too bad the movie was nothing like it. This is great! You are really poetic, and this is just like.... WOW Ayra wrote this. Do you like ...

sorry guys I've been way off task on this story lately. :oops: I've been doing more wrok on my storybooks and Innocence

thanks guys. I didn't mean to Make it anything like C.S. Lewis. The only reason I'm making an animal talk is because he's a were-ling. (like a werewolf?) Lots of ...

well dude umm this should be under another section of poetry. Its not lyric. Second, I have a bad headache right now so it didn't make sense. I'll read it ...

hey anthony its matt. YOu just pointed out that us "walking together" sounds gay. But for all you people out there who have weir dminds were not. We are getting ...

I've never played but it sounds fun. I only read the first chapter. Time. psht it disapears like that *snaps fingers* well I liked it alot and it sounds cool.

I liked it. Who's this amazing singer you wrote about? You should do more poetry it really works for you

does it relate to anything? I'm just wondering. I mean, does the toranado mean anything besides a tornado? :? Am i confusing you?

*laughing hysterically* thanks Dan, but you make me sound like a pro I'm not that good. And if you want to read good read a senior writers pieces :wink: but ...

im afraid i have to agree with them all :( work on this one

oui oui! thanks for all the help guys, i'm just getting into poetry

i cant believe no one has said anything about this yet........ i'v ehad it up here for a while :(