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Pretty good for a young writer such as yourself. This is pretty much a self contained story, and I like that; You could make more from it, or it could ...

Are you planning on writing more? If so, I would suggest writing on another program such as Word or Celtx, that way you always have access to your work outside ...

Not bad dude, (or dudette). I enjoy the descriptions of the mechs, though I don't think you needed to quote "arms" so many times. I get that they're not human ...

Mmm. Ambiguous. I like it. Overdose Self explanatory, perhaps, or an overdose of a relationship. Becoming too attached, or involved. Silence Death? Or the falling out of a relationship. Locked ...

Hey there. Gotta say, your sentiment really resonates with me. A couple nitpicks: biasness. Not a word. You can use the word "bias" in any number of ways without having ...

I'll start by saying wow. This is one of the best written pieces I've come across on here, and that's saying a lot. I can't say everything from the pacing, ...

Hey, another review here! This is a good continuation of the story. There's one thing I forgot to mention on the other review: They offered John 10,000 dollars to take ...

Beans here, the prophecy has spoken. This is a unique one, I don't get to see a lot of stories concerning dreams or matters of the mind, so I found ...

Hello! Beans here, with a healthy serving of beans I've been following the story a little bit, it's pretty good. As far as the story itself goes, there's not a ...

Good piece. The one thing I would fix is the redundancy in the first paragraph. It reads somewhat like a run-on sentence. Also, "They curl in the air and majestically ...

Quite the poignant piece, it says a lot about what we all grow through when we grow up, with youthful optimism and naivety slowly making way for the hard truths ...

I like it! I like it a lot! I feel like you could break this up a little. Your paragraphs are monolithic in their size, challenging me to climb them, ...

Beans here. Hope you like lima. I'm not entirely sure how I feel about this piece. To name a few things, a chapter need be about as long as feels ...

Hello! Beans here, with a healthy serving of beans. Hope you're not allergic. I have a few nitpicks, hopefully they aren't too nitty or too picky. “What are you in ...

Greetings! Beans here, with some beans. Hope you like beans. I like how the domestic abuse scene is juxtaposed with the rest of the piece, it sets an interesting tone ...