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Hey, this was pretty good. I didn't happen to read any of the other chapters but this works pretty well as a standalone piece. Your main character is fairly intriguing, ...

Hmm. I'm not sure how I feel about this. On one hand, your writing is fairly sound, and I can't seem to find any grammatical errors. On the other, I ...

Well hey, I love me some Ice and Fire! Let's take a look see at what you got. Aron: A terrified scream resounded through the snowstorm. I get what you're ...

Oops! I seem to have replied in the wrong text field! Silly me! Here's your review. Sitting on the bed, the board rough against my fingers, my fingernails caked with ...

Greetings friend! I can tell you're already a decent writer. I can't find much grammatically wrong with your story, so that's good. No issues there. However, while I feel like ...

Hello friend! I haven't read any of the other chapters, so as far as story critique, I'm afraid you're out of luck. However, I would be more than happy to ...

Well hey, this was a delightful read! I must confess, I hadn't read any other parts of the story, but I might be inclined to now that I've gotten a ...

Oh man, what a cliffhanger! Let me just say this was very well written, and I couldn't for the life of me find anything wrong with it! I think it's ...

Well that was interesting! Not entirely sure what's going on, but due to your writing I was able to pick up on it pretty quickly. Is there a reason your ...

Hi there! Let me preface this by saying I haven't read the other three chapters, though I could give it a whirl if you so wish. In the meantime, I'll ...

Not bad writing, I think the story is a bit cliche, but cliche isn't always bad. I think you could definitely do with a little less describing, a little more ...

You're a great writer, first and foremost. Had I been the writer you are at your age, I would probably be at Stephen King levels of success right now. I ...

Hey! Great writing. Haven't read the other two entries but I might having read this. Chapters are as long and short as you want them to be, but I felt ...

C'mon baby light my fire... I don't have much to offer here, it seems like you know what you're doing so I'll just leave a few tidbits here; Try and ...

Hey Buddy! Thanks for sharing! I have only a few nitpicks, mainly: Break up your writing! It's important that you present your story in a concise, easily digested manner. Your ...