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... then what is this for?

First thing I thought of when I read the title was James Dean. Not your best, but interesting all the same. I like the descending *s.

The title is awkward. I'd suggest "Self on Self," perhaps. Apart from that.. the imagery is pretty good, but I'm not a fan of the repeated "hates." I reckon you ...

white lightnin Amen to the white shite. My thus continued problem is that the fact that some verses carry on destroys this feeling. At least, I just felt like it ...

Fictional doesn't mean it should be un-realistic. If it would never happen in real life, it probably shouldn't be in a real life type story. meloncholenly This isn't a word. ...

No! No! I have to comment again! :D I'm not usually one for knocking other people's critique... but the whole reeling off a list thing was what sold that part ...

Been there, done that; it's not as much fun as it first appears.

::bows:: I wrote it quite a long time ago; somehow, the lyrics got all over the internet. Weird how these things happen.

The good thing is it isn't forced. The bad thing is it isn't organized, either. Throws off the flow quite a bit. Yes, quite right; I realised that I actually ...

Well, thank you all. I see that Meta got it! Karl Marx it is indeed, mysteriously brought back to teach a class of high-schoolers. I'd hoped the third paragraph would ...

so brad is cool.......................right? I was too lazy to read the whole thing but i give it a *round of applause* 10!!!! I think you actually need to find the ...

Tsk.

Weird.... I'd have to say that it was all pretty darn good (and the beginning was *excellent*) except that the last two lines sounded way cliche to me... Eh, no ...

Eh, don't sweat it - you'll come up with something better next time, I'm sure.

I hope this fits into this section. Strike one! It goes in the 'Lyrics' section. But never fear: the ever-attentive mods will soon by on hand to move it.