arianaSarroyo

Hey there. I want to start off by commending you on your swift rhythm you used here. Everything flowed together and it was a fairly enjoyable read. However, there were ...

Hi there! Ariana here with your review. I'll start off by saying I don't believe I've ever read another chapter of your novel. So this was all new to me. ...

Oh okay... :)

No, it's not wrong. I'm just curious as to how you thought this was funny :-( It definitely did not intend for you to take it as a joke :-(

Yes this is supposed to be longer. I am hoping that I can think of more ideas and a title! :)

Also, I think the beginning would sound better if you wrote something along the lines of, "Once I made it to my room, I started breathing again" Or, "Once I ...

Hi there. I want to start off this review by saying you are off to a good start. I like this overall, but there are some things I believe you ...

YWS botches up the formatting sometimes....there isn't really much you can do about that.

I agree with Questio. This reads as a rap song and it is a bit confusing. But that's okay. It's entertaining, rough around the edges but it has potential. My ...

I agree with Questio. This reads as a rap song and it is a bit confusing. But that's okay. It's entertaining, rough around the edges but it has potential. My ...

It should say one in the beginning.

Thank yoy to all who commented.

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