Hi there! Lyrical Rebel here to review your work.
This is a very powerful poem, reflecting the reality of other girls' life. It is somewhat dark and morbid but that's what makes it beautiful and unique. It's not just a story of one girl but the life of many others changed by the chaotic and forceful world. Girls like that aren't just affected by the worsening world but also by the decisions of their parents. A lot of them skips childhood quickly so as to face the hardships of life earlier than they should. When a girl grows up like that, her ways would be to hide in a mask of rigidity or to have the opportunity to stand out and learn to live the fun way which they had not the time for. Those things that drifted them from the righteous path are their escape from the pain of reality. Am I right? Hehe
All in all, the rhyming was perfect, the narration was awesome and the whole concept was astounding. You've captured my lyrical self I can't think of a better adjective to describe your piece of work. You did an awesome job! I love your poem! I hope to read more of your work later.
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