antimelrose

Oh, I guessed right about the sun "over the ocean"! I think Monet did a picture that brings this exact image to mind. As for the final line, a word ...

Wow. That was one huge thought! Probably the two most charming thoughts/phrases/words happened to be "my last one almost lasted a week" and "Rocky". Not overly imaginitive, but quirky and ...

Point taken, and I'm sorry that I didn't get the gist of it. What probably messed up my perception of it was the correlations between repeated religious imagery in the ...

Everyone mentioned all the little stuff that needed tweaking, so I don't really have anything to add to the list in that respect. "Come Home" came across as well crafted; ...

Hello! Personally, I didn't find this poem overly remarkable, but two stanzas really stood out to me: the second and the fifth. The fifth, in particular, really impressed me. The ...

Hello! Just curious about the title–were you referencing the four temperaments? There are some decent descriptions throughout. A few trite moments, too (I mean, seriously. This is human being to ...

This was really nice. Very nice images of turbulent emotions and weather. Every word felt well placed. I like the philosophical elements and the overall sparse quality. Truly, this was ...

Hello! I really liked this. "Snow" was clear and concise... the tone was quiet but very well written. No unnecessary words. Definitely a "like it" from me. "Solitary" is an ...

Hello, confused! This poem had some okay moments, but there are a few glaring grammar and spelling errors that need fixing. The meter was a bit messy as well, but ...

I really liked this. All of your descriptions were fantastic, though a few times I was left with the sense that you only included them because they were pretty. I ...

Hello! I'm going to begin by saying that it is quite a nice poem, but things stumble with the punctuation and meter. For example, the latter third line of the ...

Hello! I think this was a decent poem. There were a couple places where you tried to cram too many words to rhyme (especially the third stanza), but in general ...

Well, the narrator seemed a little too young for the brilliant anti–babysitter strategies, but overall I thought this was well written. The dialogues didn't feel wooden, and two out of ...

Yes, this was quality writing. Beautiful, even in the sadness. I agree with Explosive Pen; that one line is a standout. I don't mind your use of unusual vocabulary, since ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS! I'd like to begin by saying you have a knack for descriptions. As I read it felt very tangible, as if I truly was there. That ...