anti-pop

California Burning We turn the ashtray on its side (This space shouldn't be here...unless it was an accident ^^) and watch the dry black dust drift away in the wind. ...

Hi, there! I'm really tired right now, so it's probably not the best time for me to be reviewing anything, but I'll go ahead anyways. I didn't notice any major ...

Wow. That was incredibly powerful. I can feel your pain and sorrow by reading this. I also liked how it was a compilation of couplets rather than whole stanzas. That ...

Hi! I'm anti-pop and I'll be pointing out some things that should be corrected. tearful eyes stare at me, loud accusing voices fill the room; angry words are thrown everywhere, ...

Hi, I'm anti-pop, and I'm going to be reviewing your work today! Interesting dilemma: love and words, or love for words, as fancy dictates such. Both being beautiful as soaring ...

Hi! I'm anti-pop, and I'm going to point out just a few little things here and there: Sometimes life is a sea, deep, dark and black And it grows deeper ...

(Hi! I'm anti-pop, and I'm going to point out some little things that should be corrected) The moment she let his car drive away , (A comma should be here, ...

Wow. That completely blew me away. Absolutely brilliant. All I can say to you is kudos, friend. This was spectacular. Only one thing: "Where you had to wear adult clothes" ...

I liked it, but I can't say it was perfect. I agree with many points that Squall made, and think that most of it was pointless. However, many readers enjoy ...

I liked it...very powerful. Here's some corrections I'd make though: Did I hurt you friend? and didn't say sorry at the end(?) Did I repent for my mistake? did your ...

I honestly laughed out loud. XD That was really great. I'm no expert on haiku, so I couldn't point out anything wrong with it. Haiku is, to me, a rather ...

I would go through all of your mistakes, but vox nihili already took the liberty of doing so. :) However, to tell you the truth, it pained me to read ...

I liked it and understood what you were expressing to the audience, but it felt rather repetitive. I understand the meaning of the "Do you?" phrase, and I appreciate the ...

Ok, let me say this first: I really like what you're trying to do. I think you used a wide vocabulary and readers appreciate that. However, The first stanza took ...

It seems that this idea has been used many times before, and would appear rather stale. Try spicing it up a bit with some similes and metaphors. Symbolism is often ...