Published December 2, 2008
The moment she let
his car drive away.
The feeling of regret
came to stay.
She knew she should
have done something more.
I kiss goodbye,
as she walked to the door.
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THANKS
Yeah im going to post it soon once I finish editing it.
(Hi! I'm anti-pop, and I'm going to point out some little things that should be corrected)
The moment she let
his car drive away, (A comma should be here, not a period)
The feeling of regret
came to stay (Try not to use too many periods in poetry)
She knew she should
have done something more;(Semi-colon)
I kiss goodbye,
as she walked to the door
(Post the whole poem! I'd love to read it! Keep up the good work)
*anti-pop