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I loved this so much! That line "He could also throw me" was really unexpected and so powerful. The repetition of "If I closed my eyes it wouldn't hurt as ...

The rhymes felt really forced, maybe you could try rhyming every other line instead of all the way through? Nice message though, loving the use of repetition and the rhetorical ...

Wow. I really felt like I knew the soldier. It was like he was only fighting because that was the expectation, because he wanted to be a hero and when ...

I really enjoyed the first stanza and I thought you made a really interesting point. I wasn't as keen on the second stanza though because I thought the rythm of ...

It's is really well written but, like the other reviewers, I didn't really connect with it until the final stanza. You definitely shouldn't scrap it though, maybe just add some ...

Wow, I loved this so much... really interesting ideas. Usually I like poetry that rhymes but this didn't feel like it was missing that at all. I loved the repetition ...

Reading this made me smile :) "For only the stars dare, To shine in the dark" I thought those two lines were stunning. I disagreed with the above comment because ...

This is really thought provoking... I love the rythm to it because it's like you can't stop reading, in the same way that the traffic can't stop in the poem. ...

I loved it. Particularly the fact that there wasn't a strict rhyming scheme, just where it seemed natural. It made the narrator seem more real and easier to relate to. ...

I like the repetition a lot and the ending was beautiful and kind of sad because it's an innocent boy trying to tidy up the mess left behind by other ...

I really love how you used structure to emphasize what the poem was saying about the things missing in life that cause people to want to hurt themselves. I thought ...