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  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Fall in Love too Fast

    hiiii.... i really enjoyed reading the was kinda funny....but on a whole,,,we know what you feel when you see her..... great work... I did find few things that were incorrect.....like....spelling ...

    Sep 1, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: wishes

    I like the whole idea behind the poem......its so true that sometimes you wish to be the best of everything... and you want to improve so much that you forget ...

    Aug 29, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Leave me

    hey.....this was just an amazing piece of work....... brilliant...... u make the reader feel what you're feeling ..... however there were a few things that i noticed.....but i see that ...

    Aug 29, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: It's Hard Right?

    hiiiiii...... welcome to YWS..... 1).There's a rule over here that before you post any of your own work,you should write at least 2 reviews....but i can understand that you being ...

    Aug 29, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: dont try to care

    hiiiiiiii......... After reading the whole thing....i can be sure about 1 thing ...n that is .....you have a whole lot of emotions going on inside you.....and here you tried to ...

    Aug 27, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Sun and the Moon

    hiiiiiiiiiii...... On a whole...,i enjoyed reading the poem...... a good attempt and a nice poem 1)i feel you could improve the flow of lines like.... "I am the sun you ...

    Aug 27, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: August 22

    hiiii 1)it is nicely composed but next you write,be a bit careful that you succeed in making the reader understand what you're trying to share 2)i think it lacks a ...

    Aug 23, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: All she wanted to do was sing

    hi rach..... it was a good poem......touches one's heart once....... 1)i think its more of a narrative type of it should have been in the other category i feel 2)when ...

    Aug 22, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Your Smile So Bright

    hi GAM, i am new here too..... it's a nice piece of work though....i feel it could have been better 1)giving your poem an all capitals name really turns off ...

    Aug 22, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Hypocrite

    hi randomgrrl, i feel there are quite a few points you need to work on...... incorrect spellings really put a bad expression on your reader n also lowers his interest ...

    Aug 21, 2008


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