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Wow. What a great poem! Somehow it doesn't seem to me as if it is about the wars today. Maybe it was written in the past or perhaps in the ...

I don't think this is bad at all! I really like it. I like the opposite if fire and ice. Here are some suggestions: -First verse: I don't think ice ...

I like the idea of this poem. Some suggestions: - to make it more clear about the river (of) dreams, I would definitely capitalize it. (River Dreams) I really love ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS! Overall I'm loving the characters. The dialog is natural. That's how my sister and I talk to each other. Here are some suggestions, things to think ...

Aw! I think everyone on this website can relate to this. I think your imagery is fantastic! *bows down to you* Here are some thoughts: So we stand crucified on ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS! I enjoyed this poem. I appreciate that it wasn't preachy, so thanks for that. Here are some suggestions: It all began with light, Love surrounded the ...

I agree with isabellarivas43: SOOOOO pretty. Here are some nitpicky things: [Verse 1] Stubbornly, holding to the gates of my own cage. I fear being inside, but also what's out. ...

Welcome to YWS! I like the idea of this poem, I can completely relate to it. I have some suggestions: - I thought the rhythms took away from the meaning ...

I really love this poem! What a fantastic idea... My favorite part is the last half - I think it is deeper and more thought-provoking. How strange would it be ...

Wow! What an amazing poem. I also have a younger sister so this resonant with me. A couple of my favorite lines: I started fearing ever wandering, Critiquing glance of ...

Hi! I really liked this and would love to hear it with the music one day. A couple lines stood out to me: The lines I loved: You turned around ...

Hello! Wow! well that was steamy. I haven't read the original version but I like this one. My question is: Is Cedric (or whoever the main character is) a guy? ...

I love the meaning behind this poem. The things that you can't ever explain to people. I feel like this ALL the time!!! I agree with smilelikeyoumeanit, that my favorite ...

I like this. I like the sort of rhythm it has. I like that you didn't stanza it. I think everyone can relate this to a person who seems to ...

Hello! I don't think you NEED paragraphs but if you want them this is how I would do it: Fall's passing by And we say hello to winter The middle ...