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Hey! ajruby12 here to review! To start off, a very interesting idea! I think it's something a little different than what you may expect in a short story. I noticed ...

Hey, ajruby12 here! Wow.. This is definitely different from most poems that I've seen.. But a very good job on imagery and putting the reader into your thoughts. The only ...

Hey! ajruby12 here to review! Ok, I just have to say first off, wow! I really like this poem! And even though it doesn't directly relate to me, I can ...

Good afternoon/evening! (Welcome to YWS!) I really like your ideas for this! It's creative and very interesting. But.. Some of the section's lines are long, some short, which makes it ...

Hey, ajruby12 here... Ok, so the first 10 lines were fine.. But after that, I had a really hard time following all that. My mind started to do loops back ...

It's very... Interesting.. First off, the first feel has an s on it. But I didn't see any other grammar mistakes. But one thing I'd like to say. This is ...

Can I just say something right off the start..? This. Was. Amazing!! Really! And it may not be due to the fact that I just read a horrid piece of ...

Hey! ajruby12 here to review.. (And welcome!) I noticed a couple spelling errors, such as "You left me strangled in a dark place to deep" Also, the line underneath that, ...

I am a person who loves rhyming in poetry.. So free verse is a bit of a hardship for me to do. Anyways.. I really like this poem! I like ...

One main thing.. The phrasing just doesn't seem to fit quite right, in my opinion. But I realize everyone has their own style of writing poetry. Anyway, I like some ...

First off, you have nice word choices, but there are far too many commas (I'm so guilty of too many commas sometimes..) But it makes it a mite bit confusing. ...

The only thing that confused me was whether or not Shira was the being mentioned in the beginning or not. But I love the word choices! Unfortunately, my vocabulary doesn't ...

Hey! ajruby12 here to review. I really like how thought provoking and interesting you've made this! I think the word choice is good and the phrasing works well. However.. I'm ...

Hey! ajruby12 here to review! :) Good job! The outline of the section obviously needs to be connected and cleaned up.. And I think a few better word choices could ...

Hey! ajruby12 here to give a review! I really like the idea of a female Mob boss and I like the way you developed the main character. But there are ...