Young Writers Society

This is actually really inspirational and makes me happy. I think it taught me a lesson.
Thank you.
(Also I like your rhyme scheme. I always like your rhyme schemes.)
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Amazing job!! I really like both the rhythm and rhyme, contrary to to what you said in it:) This is so cool. I'm really not that good at poetry, but i appreciate that you are!! However, i agree with ajruby12, the end could use some work. It just doesn't seem to go with the rest of the poem very well... I think a lot of readers' attention would be lost here. Other than that, I have no complaints!! Great job, and keep writing!!

Can I just say something right off the start..?
This. Was. Amazing!! Really! And it may not be due to the fact that I just read a horrid piece of poetry.. Anyway.. I really like your creativity on this! I thought the word choices were very good also. But just one thing.. As I got to the ending of the poem, my attention was lost a little bit. Maybe if you could put some other idea in.. But really, this was very good! (Hope you have an awesome day!)

-Ariana (Silver Lady)

Wow, this is completely beautiful. I absolutely love it. This is truly how I feel all the time, and Im amazed about how well you could capture it on paper. I wish I could tell you what needs improving, but I honestly see nothing wrong with this. It's honest, beautiful, and it flows perfectly across the page. Definitely worth the read.

Well, I hoped this helped. Keep writing, you're good at it!!!!!

I love this poem so much.It really tells how a young writer or any writer feels when a piece of writing doesn't go the way it was planned. I've felt this way so many times.Critics are critics and people can make mistakes but when it comes down to it this poem is amazing.Good job! c:

That was beautiful. Perfection. It was so gooooooooooooooooooood and I love it so much!! Very nice lesson, great rhyming and rhythm, great message....Griffin you're awesome. And that's that. XD

I don't see anything wrong...... The poem was absolutely perfect, in my opinion.

You do have freedom of speech.

*This review would have made you gouge your eyes so I have protected you by removing it.*

:O :O :O :O :O :O
*breathes in*
Whoa.
I loved this poem. I mean, really, really loved this poem. No, I didn't like the rhythm the entire time, and I had to laugh that you put that in there and then I found myself later going, "Oh, the rhythm's off here...NO WAY! DID YOU JUST SEE THAT???"
I am not much of a poetry person, and I think that forcing bad poetry into books (especially fantasy *scolds many notable, published authors*) just ruins it for both poets and prose readers. But I was wanting this at the beginning of a book, any book, by the third line. No joke. I loved this poem. And you already defended everything I would have commented on (mainly the rhythm). Good job!

Wow!! I loved this poem. Something so amazing that the whole world needs to see.
Your meant to be a writer. Lemme clear this up for you in a few lines. You don't become a writer you are born a writer. A writer never becomes a writer. There is always room for improvement. A writer makes mistakes and learns from them ... corrects those and makes more mistakes. Thats what all being a writer is about. Learning from mistakes from now until forever. You never will be perfect. I loved the way you conveyed the message and writers are usually insane and mentally crazy! I just love this poem! Keep Up The good work!
My fav lines
"We will always have harsh critics,

And those who give affection.

We will never be on target,

Not the first time, at least,

And that is the lesson, I think,

that I was trying to teach."

You what they say? "I don't know a key to success, but the key to failure is trying to please everyone." All I have to say is that you keep writing no matter what everyone else says. I like your attitude in this poem. There's nice rhyming and flows fine. My suggestion is to shape it more. Turn it to metaphor, so not anyone can see what you're really talking about, only people who find themselves in the poem. That's why like when poems are more mysterious. Otherwise it's boring (I'm not saying your poem is boring, don't get me wrong). When you're poeting, leave it to your soul. Shape figures, subconscious pictures and turn them into weirdest words you can imagine. That's what people love reading, not obvious things. I hope I helped and I wish you success in your future writing/poeting. Keep writing and have fun!

~Bard

Hi GriffinClaw,my gosh,you have just expressed what I felt in myself.It is true and indeed a statement that embitter our feelings.

# Some of you will hate my topic

My rhythm, the rhyme,

And I will sit here thinking

“Well, that was a waste of time.

Guess I’m not a writer.

I stink and I fail.” -->Well,I feel the same too.And there were times when I want to scream, why they do not understand. And finally, I give up "Probably my fault for not writing something right."Perhaps the poem that we do has to be kept in a diary.

I just love the theme here and the ideas you bring here is just so amazing.You know what you do,and you know what the goal is.So I think this is a nice poem to read.In addition,you have a good diction here that makes your poem more interesting to read.Keep it up!
Kudos,cheers
~Dark

It's awesome. I remember feeling like this once, when I was in, oh I don't know, 5th grade? In 5th grade I remember thinking everything I do wasn't good enough. Especially my writing. The truth is that I was lonely and everyone was cruel. I had different thoughts and had issues fitting in. So I would write and be mad at every mistake I made. 'Course I also talked to my LPS toys so I wouldn't lose any of my thoughts, seeing everything at a different view. Now I know that if your perfect, you did something wrong. You can't please everyone, for they all think differently.

Thanks for this poem, it's awesome. Mistakes define a writer after all...........

This was great, and I'm sure most writers flt this way at one point. I have to say that when I saw the small description before I clicked on this I thought it was the author saying that they weren't much of a writer. then I saw it was you GriffinClaw, and I was like, oh, I guess that was what the poem is about.

We will never be on target,

Not the first time, at least,

That is one of the things I think we all as writers need to realize, and reviewers as well. As writers we shouldn't get discouraged, and as critics and reviewers, w need to make sure we are respectful when we review. Great poem.
Keep it up!

I feel like a can relate to this. Sometimes I do feel like I have no purpose writing, that I myself am just a wannabee try hard. But then the next day, or maybe even a week later I'm back at it. Well done with this, you did an incredible job. And thank you for posting this!

RLK.

This was beautiful.