adriangarcia

It was an OK poem. I'd suggest making poems with more tangible influences. What I mean by that is try making narratives. Because, you're spitting out boring ... just OK ...

Not much to say since it's a shallow, short poem. But, it was a sweet poem. GRAMMAR! Don't forget it! -Adrian

Sorry I can't give this a proper review but I really loved this poem! It's to-the-point, short, and sweet! Everything I love in a poem! Very nice, indeed! Keep Writing! ...

This poem was in a word, interesting. However, the message is quite muddled, at least for me. -ADD grammar (as with "Mother") -I might suggest rhyming in this poem, if ...

I really like the message you conveyed with this poem. Refreshing. I suggest adding grammar. It hurts your poem without it. Also, some lines were lengthy and messed with the ...

This poem actually made sense. So, you've at least done something that most people have trouble doing! However, please, add grammar! EDIT! -Adrian

It is a typo in the PM. Sorry about that. Your welcome, Adrian

Very refreshing. I enjoyed it immensely. Criticism ... Some words upset the flow of the poem. It almost makes it come to a halt. But, like I said, I enjoyed ...

Your poem satisfied me. But, I suggest editing more. It seemed too short and broken for the a subject that is so deep. It needs to be thick. But, I ...

I was a little confused. I thought it had to do with homosexual incest. Then, I read it again. And, it made much more sense. So, I suggest editing it. ...

It was a good start. Based on what you wrote, it has true potential. Lines flowed well and had meaning. However, I have no idea what you're talking about. Elaborate ...

It was a great poem. I was expecting it. Which in some cases is bad but I don't think it was for your case. It worked out nicely. Good imagery. ...

I thought that it was perhaps about Jesus Christ. Jesus being the speaker. However, I really have no basis since He had only twelve apostles and you uses 'twenty-four' unnamed, ...

I do like the general theme, or message, of the poem. Having said that, I would love to see you expand the actual poem. I think it would be something ...

I love the first stanza! However, the second and the third were less then spectacular. But, the last stanza was fairly good. I enjoyed it. If you were to edit ...