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Hey Silver! I know this kind of late, but I need a first chapter review for my badge, so here we go. ^^ Okay, so I'm reading your chapter, and ...

Hey!^^ Nitpicks When I read through the chapter, I noticed the word 'heard' a lot of times. A good thing you could do to avoid repetition is to either read ...

Hello there, Zontafer here to review your work! Rhyming and Words I read your A/N and I know you did this for fun, but since I'm reviewing this I kind ...

Where's the old Howl? :o *is confused* Nitpicks She blew air as much as she could into her hands and coughed. I suggest you to add 'hot' before air, to ...

Hello, Zontafer here! First off, I'd like to apologize for not reviewing this. I haven't really reviewed anything at all lately. :/ (Sorry I didnt quite see the nitpick note ...

Zontafer here! ^^ Nitpicks ... purr emitting from it. Laughing, I gently pet its neck. The fur feels like silk, since it’s so surprisingly soft. In mere seconds, this large ...

Did somebody mention dragons? Zontafer here to review your work! Nitpicks First off, I noticed you didn't really break your story into paragraphs. When the reader spots a piece without ...

Hey there, Zontafer here to review your piece! First I want to tell you your choice of title is pretty good! ^^ ...of an orgasm spread like a virus through... ...

Hello, Zontafer here to review your poem! First off, I lived the way you started out with questions. It kind of wants me to keep on reading, to find out ...

Hello there, Zontafer here to give a short review on your work (I'm not an expert on poems). "Try and tear us apart." I believe this should be: "Try to ...

Zontafer here to review your piece! Nitpicks ...and Alice was right behind him. Not really a nitpick, but I'd suggest replacing 'and' with 'with', as you used ', and' in ...

Hello, Zontafer here to review your piece! Considering the length of the poem, I think you managed to get a lot down. I mean, you could literally write a story ...

Hello, Zontafer here for a review! ^^ It looks like I can't find many nitpicks here, so I'll focus on the content. First off, I liked the way you started ...

Hello, Zontafer here to review your piece! Nitpicks The hospital soon looms over the 8 of us, all abandoned and looking like one of those places out of ghost shows ...

Hello! Zontafer here to give you my first review of Review Day! ^^ Nitpicks I ignored the last bit of what they were saying then called Mousse to follow me ...