Zion

*claps* very impressive indeed m'lady. But I think it would be waaay better if you read the poem while listening to a great song, it has more effect to it,..

Ten bucks says she got enlightnet so no more Vampires for her. Right?

thank you, ladies and gentlemen for the detailed comments. I shall see to it, I get the job done :)

Hehe, this was fun to read :D

rolf!

I loved it. Hahah I swae i heard music inside my head as I was reading it. the music sounded great as well. Very original im sick of all the ...

Thanks a bunch. :D I know it needs a major work. I just felt bored, scribbled it and posted it without any editing.

three letters w-o-w a bit confusing but very very amazing

Now thats what I call profesional editing! :D

how was Heaven? I only had the chance to read Inferno

I loved inferno. thats all Im gonna say

Yeah same here. I had the effect of a something written in a rush. Just a pile of pretty words. Its not as good as the others (from you) but ...

Thanks Chevy I'll see what I can do. Im a total noob at poems, infact this is my 5th I think ever written.

not much of a crit, esspecially when it comes to poems, but I liked it. A bit spit n shine here and there and it will be great. Reminds me ...

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