ZanyPlebeian

Well, I must say I liked the poem. BUT I didn't like the rhyming scheme...if you could have said the same thing without rhyme, I would be much happier with ...

It's always a good rule to let a poem speak for itself, because you won't always have the chance to explain it to your reader.

I liked this. Drop/change this, though: "I cry because I will miss you a lot." It's cliche and doesn't really contribute much to the emotional impact of the poem. Brian

Great poem!! I enjoyed every line of it. One thing though, never present a negative image of yourself before the poem, or even after; if you are that concerned with ...

Ah! I enjoyed this...I will admit that it could have been expressed better, but the thing I liked was the truly original subject of the poem. Honestly never read anything ...

It's a difficult poem to read...certain things like "Swallowing out ribbons" are very surreal. You may have been going for that, but I couldn't find much to identify with in ...

I agree with the consensus on "lost my hand like it’s not been bothered me when I wrote it but I left it in just because I like putting up ...

I agree...this is better than the little of what of yours I've read in the past. I would suggest trying to take some new topics and attempt writing about them--often, ...

I know what pyres are.

It seemed like a poorly done rant to me. Drop the rhyme and always think super-hard before calling comeone a bitch in a poem (or anywhere)...it's very, very juvenile.

I wrote it stream of consciousness--when I was writing it a powerful childhood image came to mind and I couldn't shake it. The poem demanded to be included in my ...

Wonderful!! The best poem I've read here since I've been here, certainly! No major changes besides some minor typos. Keep it up! -Brian

I thought it was a good idea moderately executed...and that a few edits could do you good.

Though you may have had a message to relay through further writing, I really like it just the way it is.

I've read versions of this poem a thousand times. "I'm different, why can't you just accept me for who I am." I'm not saying it shouldn't be said; it should ...