ZanyPlebeian

This was enjoyable for me. I found the metaphor of "the beast" cliche, and would try to change that.

" ed intendo farlo " means something to the effect of "and I intend to!" I really wrote this as a random interlude to any seriousness after being annoyed by ...

I really liked the feel of this piece. Being a fan of German myself, I liked how you integrated the language. I also dig the long, flourid lines...they really fit. ...

Very good. However, I think you could have found something more interesting to say on the final line. Brian

Excellent. I really enjoyed this read; don't have anything to add at this point. Brian

Pretty piece. I think it was a bit obvious...anytime wilted roses enter poetry, you're treading on old ground and it's hard to make it seem fresh and new. But still ...

I wrote it when I was high....

Very nice read. I don't have any specific problems with it, but I would like to commend you on how you pulled off the rhyme. It felt natural. That is ...

Psy, You overlooked the plentiful (and quite rare) praise I dropped on you. I didn't think this was weird at all--rather, I thought it was very beautiful. There was just ...

Fourth stanza, I could swear you ripped that off from Dylan. You did, didn't you? If you didn't, you ripped it off from someone. I'm on to you. It fits, ...

I understood the message on a second reading. I like the theme of this piece, but to me it appears to be making too much of an attempt at a ...

Yes, I decided I hate the lyrics. (well, love the lyrics but not in the poem.) Insomnia does some crazy things to the mind. :P I edited them out.

Deborah is one of the Judges in the old testament of the Bible.

I'll basically agree with the above posters. It was a beautiful piece and an enjoyable read. :) Brian

I felt the rhyming was really forced... Also, I didn't feel the subject matter was new or exciting and it didn't speak to me too much. The repetition in the ...