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Siete Vulcano

by ZanyPlebeian


Run to the pound,
boy, run It's there
you'll be
when you've found it.


I'm not clove-hooved It's okay
to get close to me--you say Siete Vulcano
I say no, no I'm not--volcanoes
have strength. Avete resistenza! you say
No, I don't have strength, I say
and it goes on like this for a while.

Sono un poet! I call out
to no one. It's fashionable to drop
foreign words,
Hemingway-style,
ed intendo farlo!


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Tue Apr 04, 2006 1:25 am
ZanyPlebeian says...



"ed intendo farlo" means something to the effect of "and I intend to!" I really wrote this as a random interlude to any seriousness after being annoyed by all the foreign language I was reading in poetry. So I basically chose some random ideas and translated them into Italian and added them to this poem.




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Mon Apr 03, 2006 11:26 pm
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For some reason, I think the first stanza would be better as the last. Sort of like the poem's fading out. Maybe that's just the italics getting to me.

I'm not clove-hooved It's okay
to get close to me--you say Siete Vulcano
I say no, no I'm not--volcanoes
have strength. Avete resistenza! you say
No, I don't have strength, I say
and it goes on like this for a while.


The line breaks were a little off here. I would re-do it like this:

I'm not clove-hooved.
It's okay to get close to me.
you say Siete Vulcano
I say no, no I'm not--volcanoes
have strength. Avete resistenza! you say
No, I don't have strength, I say
and it goes on like this for a while.

I don't understand the foreign words either, but I'll take a guess...Be a volcano! Have strength! I am a poet! and I have no clue with the last one.

It's weird, but I like it, even if I don't really get it. Keep writing! :thumb:




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Sun Apr 02, 2006 3:33 am
xanthan gum says...



I'd hate to sound stupid, but I really can't understand the..er...language in this poem. I bet it means something. Really. But it's vague with all the forgien-ness.





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