ZanyPlebeian

Hmm...unbanned I see! Well, all I can say is that I have an ampersand fetish and I count two of them in your poem, so it's okay by me! :D ...

There were a few bumpy spots...but I think those can be worked over. Some of the rhyme is just obviously put where it is just so it can rhyme, and ...

He was a day-gazer Articulate, motivated, past [I'm not sure if this is supposed to be connected to the next line or not...] The rush of air on wintry mornings ...

The images you presented me in this poem were good. The only problem I can see is that all it consists of are somewhat abstract images suspended in a timeless, ...

Reminds me of much of my life...which is why I liked it. The words fit together well enough, though I think maybe they could have been expanded upon a bit. ...

Beautiful and refreshing. Some small problems: "Keep beaming, knowing your on top" should be you're . "He lip-folds me into corners Lashing, cat-like (tire like)" I guess I just don't ...

Interesting seemed quite child-like to me, and I usually am not into that. You may have been going for that though. I guess the whole read I thought of monsters ...

Mmmm... :) This poem made me happy just experiencing it. Very, very excellent piece of writing. Please, continue doing what you're doing. It's working. Brian EDIT: Oh, one thing, though. ...

A beautiful piece and a very enjoying read. The only nitpicks I have: You turn you head away Shamed to see me Abashed Ashamed And toss me aside with disgust, ...

I haven't read anything of your before, but this is a nice effort. I can underdstand what you are saying, but I think it can be said better. I like ...

This one didn't really do as much for me as some of your recent stuff...I don't know why you decided to rhyme this. Was it just something randomly decided? To ...

I feel like this is too bland, too plain...and PEOPLE: haiku does not mean just 5-7-5...that's the form it is in, but the haiku exists to comment on nature...there are ...

Another beautiful poem! I can't even significantly comment on it because it's soooo good. I hate just slathering comments on people, so I'll try to think of omething to criticize. ...

Oooo...intriguing...I really like the flow of this poem, and the pace it goes. Oftentimes I find it hard for poetry (especially mine!) to keep up with the crazy pace of ...

Wow!! I must say, this is one of the most refreshing rhymed poems I've read in a long while. The words you use to express yourself are just beautiful and ...