ZZAP

This poem was delightful. I like the theme of personifying a window; it's a clever gift for a reader. Also using the word 'smudging' in both the title and line ...

very well done! i liked the whimsical but solid feeling i get from reading this piece. kind of like a paradox. your usage of colors is the right direction for ...

-.- why not turn it into a rap where mac dre gets his thizz on, snoink? very gooder done yeah. i think it's a nice length, as adding to it ...

not a very nice person!!! enough to kill you with words huh? well to start. i do very much like the way you lead me through the small details. and ...

Donovan, you made me do it. You know how much I hate critiquing poetry and analyzing it, but I will subdue my own limitations to this one favor. But be ...

Very nice editors! Very good! Sorry fire, just checking up on my team mates... Are you getting consent the way I said Sam and El? :? Needs to be done, ...

WOW! You are very descriptive in your writing... Unbelievably sound! I love it! Here... You need to flow it together a bit more. Somehow you already do that, but when ...

Okay... sorry about that. Just testing the system. Very nicely done with the story... I like how you described the intoxication of being 'bleeded'. You seem very solid on you ...

You know my thoughts on Forgotten Realms... Might be the book on place for the next nice warm fire :twisted: :twisted: :twisted: -Z

I don't even want to talk about that... :shock: :shock: Just amazing, his style and his characters. I'm speechless... -ZZAP

If you keep self-deprecating, I will ban you from the forum personaly. :D :D Like I told you before, I'll finish Crysi's story and move on to yours. You can ...

Reminds me of something I wrote years back... Not nearly as elaborate and detailed, but the same idea. Accidentaly killing someone you didn't know who was there. My reason was ...

VERY INTERESTING!! Wow! I take that as just freewriting from you? That was incredible. It was very open, and had me relate. Your ideas were perfect, all the right details ...

Really fast... Whoa! That's a big run-on in the first sentence. We can't start out that way. I would combine the first part with the third, and keep the second ...

Haven't read the whole thing... Only some spots. Very small. I have very little time and I'll try to do as much as possible to give my opinion. Okay, you ...