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I feel like I m watching from a window. I m not living my life; I m just a spectator. I can see the banging at the door, I can hear it, I can almost feel it. I watch as once again, I stupidly approach the door and senselessly welcome in the Visitor.
I watch myself sit in the all too familiar place and just stare. I don t move, I don t even try to prevent it from happening. I observe as I grab the visitors hand and pull him closer. It s like I m watching a scary movie over and over again. I know exactly what is going to happen yet I still sit there and wait in expectation, as if I m waiting for the plot to change at some time. But 'some time' doesn t arrive. But what if I scream louder or I shout - what should happen? Maybe the plot will miraculously change itself, maybe it will. But no, never has this happened before and I am beginning to lose hope in it ever happening. All my shouts and screams are in vain as I watch the visitor surround me, as if he is overtaking my whole world, my whole being.
Okay this is an interesting one. That start made me think the title connects to this story in one way and then we move onto the second paragraph to see that it is the more literal connection after all and I really don't know what to feel about that opening. I think one hand its beautiful have that almost ambiguity in how the title refers to two things and really grabs your interesting so quickly with these thoughts, but also the way it makes things feel more literal than they are sort of dampens the effect of the less literal sense and leaves us wanting something a little more here.
I watch as the visitor advances towards me. I watch as he sears through me as if to delve into my soul. I silently observe in terror as I see myself falling apart. There I am, letting him do it to me. I just let him press harder and deeper into me. I scream and shout at myself, sometimes I even approach the door to my life, but I just linger at the doorway as I watch myself go through this ordeal. Yet the me I m watching doesn t stop it, I don t even try. The visitor just carries on as I scream and shout at him to stop. But no, I watch, in stupefied disbelief as my life just slips away. It just falls to the floor. And only at this time do I look down at what is happening, I watch myself as I see the pain just fall to the floor. I see myself smiling as I watch my life disappear in front of me.
Well that got dark rather fast there as it becomes starkly obvious what exactly this visitor really means all over again. I was thinking of some sort of home invasion but this is now suddenly a much more powerful scene. This reverberates so strongly here and I think this paragraph just does an absolutely amazing job of bringing across the sheer terror and detachment. It does make me even more convinced that you need to be more careful about that opening here.
I just look numb. Each time I see a droplet of me fall to the floor it feels like a thousand stabbing pains, but when I watch myself all I can see, could be described as, is almost relief on my face.
The droplets just carry on falling as the visitor sears away at me, he seems to become more vigorous as the relief I see on my face turns into ecstasy. I just sit and scream through the window but neither the visitor nor I hear me. It gets worse as the time progresses, suddenly the cuts become deeper and more dangerous. I watch myself as I slip away, but I m not dead yet. It s like I m watching me murder myself but I don t want to die just yet so I have to just sit here and watch it worsen and worsen, yet I can do nothing about it. I can just see myself and the me I see - I am ashamed of.
Okayy....well that took a turn there. Now it seems to blend together another scene here am I'm not quite sure where exactly that's meant to go. I have to admit I am little confused here by the end. It all builds up so nicely but the last paragraph just doesn't seem to be continuing that goal properly here and its certainly not doing so all that clearly. I think you might need to take a second look there.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.