Yuriiko

Hello there, Dance! Here for my 399th review! *pops confetti* It was three a.m. on a Sunday night and the only thing keeping me up was the whir of my ...

Hey there Solvaness! Here as promised. Nitpicks in the spoiler. Yes, sometimes the truth hurts. Sometimes it doesn't. And sometimes, you don't quite know. Your introductory line quite surprised me ...

Hello there Rainbow! You have a good voice coming from your main character. The pacing is good but there are just some grammatical errors that tend to distract the flow. ...

Hello there Eloquent! This looks interesting. I like how you kept the ending with a touch of a suspense. The interaction between the two characters are almost realistic. What just ...

Hello there! Here as promised. Yasmine was all he could think of, her soft black hair and pale blue eyes. Her laugh made anyone smile and warmed him up instantly ...

Hello there! It was a very cold evening on the deck of that luxurious cruise ship. At last, everything happened according to plan- the Gueverra High School batch 2004-2005's reunion ...

Hello Vari! Though I want to review those two parts of the chapter, it seems that you need some help about publishing your novel here. Once you click that, you'll ...

Hello Silentwords! I think you have a pretty good start. Your portrayal of Hades as a comical and sarcastic character is very impressive and amusing. However, there are some things ...

Hello there DarkRain! First of all, you have a good moving piece. The pacing was flowing very well because you actually didn't have any awkward sentences existing on this piece. ...

Hello Gheala! First of all, I think you have a good excerpt here. I liked the way you kept me suspense all the way to the end of this piece. ...

Hello DramaLlama! I have to be honest. This story needs to be inserted in a big repair machine so it could come out fixed. I don't want to sound rude ...

Hey there PhoenixRain! Here as requested. Some nitpicks of mine: She doesn’t go to school here, so no one really knows her very well, and she's quite (typo?) , so ...

Hello Jasmine! It seems that you have lots of good critiques before me, so I hope you don't mind if I repeated something here. I haven't really read every review ...

Hey Jasmine! Here as promised. :wink: "Well, how is this my problem?" It should be "that" because she's referring to something outside herself. "It's not. I guess you can leave ...

Aloha Shubhi! Here as requested. ^^ Nitpicks hidden in the spoiler. I had lot of my mind right now, and the least I wanted was some drunken customer going on ...