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  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Return

    Hello there, Cafelene! First off, welomce to YWS! :wink: Skins pretty much covered up those mistakes that I've seen already. (Actually, I saw your story first without a review in ...

    May 29, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: There's No Need To Yell

    Hello there! Characters: I like how you keep your MC fearless and strong. She isn't a whiner or doesn't ask for help. They are believable. The man actually scares me. ...

    May 28, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Too Good For You, Too Good For Me

    Hello there, Kaedee! Oh, this seems to be an expressive or a telling piece. Wow, there's a strong aura coming from your MC as I read this. hehe. I like ...

    May 28, 2010
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: A little sun dont hurt nobody...

    Hello there, Eraqio! Okay, I thought this was really good because this lyric opens the wonders of summer. :D (The heat or the sun, pools and beaches, etc.) It's like ...

    May 28, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Love Has No Boundaries-Ch-2

    Hello there, Shubhi! Some critiques have pretty covered up all those corrections and mistakes, so I won't bother to it already. :wink: Things that confuses and destroys the flow of ...

    May 27, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: I Don't Want to Die

    Hello there, Skins! :) I agree with Classy, the family relations in the plot is quite confusing. Try to make this things clear by adding more emphasis on the relationships ...

    May 26, 2010
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: Before I Sleep...

    Hello there, BlueRaspberry! First of all, your username's cute. :wink: I have to agree with 'Gen'. You just blandly tell us the plot without anything to describe and feel for ...

    May 26, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: I'll be there

    Hello there! I'm not good in reviewing poetry but I'll try my best to be of help. :wink: Okay, I like this though it was short but it was cute. ...

    May 25, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Summer!

    Hello there, KAH! Summer is sweet, You can be free. No more school, Only at the pool. I like the four starting lines but maybe you can try other words ...

    May 23, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: The Story, The Song, and The Picture (prolouge)

    Hello there, dark angel! Here to review. Ok, 'JackpotJohnson' said already the things that I was suposed to say here. :o Anyways, this is a good prologue. :) No grammar ...

    May 23, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Cotton Candy

    Hello there, magic! I'm not really good at reviewing poetry but I'll try my best. :D I'm sweet I can even be used as a Valentine sweet Okay, this is ...

    May 23, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: deleted

    Hello there, dasiamari! Here to review. :D Errors/ Corrections in Red . Comments in Black . As I looked into her sky blue eyes and said the last words that ...

    May 23, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: That FAll Day

    Hello there, Cindy! Welcome to YWS! How are you doing so far? :D Anyways, I have to agree with Kaedee. If I will be so harshly honest; your prologue's totally ...

    May 23, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: No Name yet - please help

    Hello there, Ofir! Here to review. Corrections/ Comments in blue This was no big deal, I tried to convince myself feebly. I'd opened this door a million times before. No ...

    May 22, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Not Much To lose (ch1)

    Hello there, KAH! Here to review. :D Errors in red Comments in blue While the wind scattered its creamy clouds, melting the perfect shade of blue to the hard cool ...

    May 22, 2010


The words you speak become the house you live in.
— Hafiz