Yuriiko

Hello there! Here as promised. :3 First of all, I apologize for the long delay of this. School really is killing me. *sighs* Okay. So i think this has potential, ...

Hello there Jash! Here as promised. First of all, I'm going to apologize for the long delay of this, since I've been really busy this past few week.s Hope you ...

Hello there BlueShubs! I apologize for the delay because I've been really very busy with school stuffs and all. So, I hope this would probably worth the wait. First of ...

Hello there! I apologize for the delay. Anyways, here I am. :3 I have to agree with the reviewers above me. The repetitions you have actually made the poem into ...

Hello there, SilentRain! Here as requested. Comments, suggestions and nitpicks in RED. Look at me daddy look what I did. I painted a picture. I painted it red. Perhaps if ...

Hello there, Solva! I think this poem has a potential. Perhaps just try to sort out or place in some punctuations to make the flow of this piece better. Also, ...

Hello there, my friend! Here to review. First of all, (personally speaking) I think this has improved much better than the original version. Your vocabulary here is pretty good and ...

Hello there, Calli! Here as requested. :wink: Nitpicks, comments highlighted in RED . I only had a vague idea what he looked like from pictures I saw of him, but ...

HI there, Skinnykins! Here to you-know-what. :wink: First of all, if there is Team Edward and Team Jacob in Twilight then there is Team Oliver and Team Richard here too! ...

Hello there, Skinnykins! Here to review your third chapter. Nitpicks, comments and errors in RED . “Ollie?” Ella spoke softly as she gently shook Oliver’s arm. “Ollie, can you hear ...

Hello there again, Skinnykins! Here to review. There wasn’t a sound to be heard, it was ever so calming . That was one of the things I loved about living ...

Hello there, Skinnykins! Here as requested. First of all, I thank you for the request. However, I don't think I'd be much of that help as seeing those previous critiques ...

Hello there! Here to review your piece. :smt001 Breathing heavily , Selene Day peered around at the corner of the dark forest. Nothing. The forest was thick, evergreens were everywhere. ...

Hello there! Here to review. First of all, I thank you for the good read. The imageries and as well with the metaphors in the poem flowed very well although ...

Hi there! *waves* Here to review. :3 The first thing I've noticed is your title. It's just tad confusing since the story's all based on third person point of view. ...