Yuriiko

Oh. Hello there, SilentRain! This is an interesting piece. The metaphors flowed very well with the emotions because I don't think they were worded awkwardly. Perhaps in the first stanza, ...

Hello there! Here as requested. First of all, I find the piece confusing because it lacks depth and matter inconsistencies. If your aim is to make the poem and your ...

Hello Meepy. RAWR. Corrections in RED. She scatters seeds in the snow, Why no one has noticed this? It should be 'scatter', since the noun after it is plural. :3 ...

Hello there! Here as requested. Seeing that the previous critiques has taken care well of the nitpicks, corrections and stuffs, I don't think I still need to do a line-by-line ...

Hello there, Shubs! Here as promised. :3 The words slowly swooshed by me, me trying to grab them with all the force I could produce and they blowing past faster ...

Hello Sniks! Here to review. :3 Good story you have here. The pace flow is just about right, so you should be happy for that. Grammatically speaking, I'm impressed with ...

Hello there, Tiger! Here as requested. First of all, I wanted to apologize for having been so delayed for this review. I've just been very busy with movie editing and ...

Hello there, Silent Rain! Here for my (very) delayed review. My general impression is that you've got some good concept here, which is obviously a good thing. However, it might ...

Hello there! Here to review. :3 I find this piece one-dimensional, or there's just no depth to it. Sure you're talking about the darkness and being trapped, which I think ...

Hello there! Here as requested. :3 First of all, turn on the windshields. If you know what I mean, because the heavy rain is making the piece all blurry and ...

Hello there! First of all, you have good plot here. I'm actually a bit intrigued to know the continuation. However, there are just some matters that I'm very confused with. ...

Hello Iceprincess! I am here to review your piece, as one of the judges in Postsecret Contest. :wink: First of all, using the second POV is one of the factors ...

Hello there, Sniks! :wink: Just by looking at those critiques before me, I don't really have that much to say. Yes, it's a tad cliche' but hey, I think you've ...

Hello there Jashy! I'm here to review, as one of the judges for the contest. :3 I think I've probably said this to you, on your piece I've reviewed last. ...

Hey there Lavender! My general impression of this story is that... I don't think this is even a story. I mean, the main character isn't yet developed very well or ...