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Wow ! This was an amazing story to read ! I was captivated my the first 3 sentences ! I read the whole thing and i can't wait to read ...

Hey there :) Well the first thing i noticed like everyone else here that it is one great big paragraph. I think if you went through this and actually made ...

Hey there ! Just came and read your chapter :) It is a very cliche chapter . I have come across a lot of stories that are like this. You ...

Hey there :) Just a quick suggestion about the first paragraph, You use a VERY long run on sentence. Try calming it down and make it more interesting with periods ...

I really like this ! You definitely portrayed the main character very well. I did notice a lot of spelling mistakes towards the beginning but not so much near the ...

Hey Lillie ! Just wanted to point a couple things out!! 1. You have a very well written plot here but I agree with the people below this, you use ...

This is very interesting ! I am glad someone tried something new here in YWS. You don't see a lot of books about killers on here (not that I have ...

You have done an amazing job with this piece of literature ! Your whole story made me see what they were seeing and i truly think that you did an ...

This poem is amazing ! It is so full of emotion and I feel like i can really feel what you are feeling ! You have a very natural flow ...

Hey !! You have a good piece of work here :) I think that if you toned it down with the descriptions and actually went back and edited then it ...

Wow maleficent !! You are a very talented writer ! You're prologue kept me wanting to read it . I truly LOVE all of your characters and definitely want to ...

Amazing. That is the only word i can think of for this short story. I think the way you used such educated words is what really captivated me. This was ...

Hello Writing Wolf. :) I really like your concept here but i do not get the last little bit. It doesn't exactly make sense to me. Anyways, I think that ...

"A knock sounded from the hallway door. He was right on time as usual. I set down my teacup and started towards the door." I think the beginning of this ...

I can see a lot of things that you could have done a lot better but i do appreciate that you are a very well written writer. If you review ...