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Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
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A fresh start. That’s what they were calling it. A chance to start over again with new faces. I knew it was a lie though. They didn’t move me for a ‘fresh start’, they moved me because it was too embarrassing to face their peers with a 16 year old daughter who had been raped and impregnated at 15. Most people would embrace their child, but not my parents. They looked at the situation like it was my fault. They sent me away for the whole pregnancy to live with my grandma. I was supposed to come back after 9 months looking the same as I did when I first left, the only difference being I would be without a baby. But that wasn’t what I wanted. I didn’t want to give up my child. I had already had so much taken from me, I wouldn’t let anyone take my child. I didn’t tell my parents that though, until the day I gave birth to my son, Hunter. My grandma knew what was going to happen, that I was planning to keep him and she was ok with that. she understood what I was going through and knew that my parents wouldn’t accept my choice, so we both decided not to tell them. Yet, once they found out they were furious. Not that I kept the child, or that I wouldn’t be a fit mother for my son. They were concerned what the neighbors would think. I remember my mother screaming at me, “You’re father just got a promotion! What will his co-workers think? You can’t do this to us!” I couldn’t do it to them. How dare I, the 15 year old who just had a child after being raped, put my family in this position. My grandma was supportive of me and my choice though, and knowing that she would be moving to an elderly care center, decided to have me move in with my aunt and her boyfriend. That was that. My parents put up no fight. They didn’t care. As long as me and my son were out of their lives.
Well that's a rather powerful start there for a story...definitely talking of a very realistic and rather horrible set of circumstances for our protagonist here, and really establishing the main premise of what this story is going to be about really well there.
I love the way that the background is set here. You've directly gotten to the point about the horrible set of circumstances that put this girl in the situation she's currently in and the way that the parents and then the grandmother reacts to it all. There's a nice amount of contrast being shown here to see just how the parents receive the news and what sort of priorities the parents seem to have along with the kind of thoughts that her grandma has. You clearly see just how much support is actually being offered to her from either side and the ulterior motives behind here parents ideas.
All in all, this builds a nice picture for us to get a sense of who each person and how the protagonist ends up where they do, its almost a nice bit of backstory here to start with. Overall, seems like it could lead to a pretty interesting story here, and one that I would potentially read.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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