YellowSweater

Woah. Woah! This is absolutely incredible I am in awe. The prose is airtight. And the characters and their relationships are complex, sophisticated, and what's more, I actually liked them! ...

I cracked up so hard! I adored this. Thanks for posting! Your commentary made it even better (the elbow fetish:) I was actually really surprised by the paragraph: "They looked ...

The Devil makes a really good point! I am not usually one for rhyming poems. And I know that you were not necessarily trying to make fun of Abrahamic religions, ...

Oh my! I loved that so much! Especially the ending! The world-building is so vivid. It left me curious, but also satisfied. Your prose is clear and clean. And I ...

Ok, I am going to be completely honest, I never seem to be able to get all the way through fantasy stories written on here. But this one I couldn't ...

This is such a sweet story. And I love the perspective it is told from. I think houses, more than other inanimate objects take on a personality a sort of ...

This story was so shockingly sad and depressing, but that's a good thing because it means that your writing inspired a lot of empathy. You did a great job building ...

Wow! This is such an interesting mix of sci-fi and epic occult fantasy. I like how you get straight into the action. But it might be nice if you developed ...

Wow! This is wonderful. It cuts straight to the center of the onion. I really love how you mention all the different kinds of onions in the beginning. Firstly, it's ...

The imagery in this is incredible! I also actually really like your transitions. The poem kind of feels like a stream of consciousness of a lucid dreamer. The images you ...

I can not believe this is your first poem! It's absolutely incredible! you really made me think. But you also managed to make it flow well, which can be difficult ...

I really want to give this poem a great review, but I literally don't have words to express how amazing it is. It's gorgeous, delicate, heart-singingly poignant. I particularly like ...

This is lovely! So sensual and delicate! I know this is probably going to sound pretentious, and I really hope you are not offended, but to be perfectly honest I ...

I loved your piece! I'll start with my critiques and then I will go on to rave. The beginning doesn't Immediately catch my attention. And I actually think that could ...

I am so sorry you had such an awful experience with sharing your writing. This essay is truly excellent. It's clean, clear, concise, and passionate. I loved the line: "Writing ...