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Oh..ok. I'm sorry, I tried. I guess I could make her happy or bouncy or something, but then I wouldn't be able to relate to my own character, and then ...

Thanks Shaard, you have been a...relentless and untiring viewer of my work. You rarely have a negative comment, and are a constant encouragement. Thanks! ~ Spiral

Wow, everybody, thanks for the harsh critisism, I needed that. You gave me some good ideas, and I will try to use them all to their best potential. And ok, ...

Ok, thanks everyone, I'll try to apply your advice as well as I can. Also, adddictiontofiction, thanks especially for the pointer on the redundant phrasing, I didn't notice that.

Wow, thanks, Kate, I didn't notice the switch from present to past. Also, I agree, I think it would flow better. I will do that, thanks!

When, where, what??? And killing yourself, isn't that a bit dramatic? :D And, also, good! You like Twilight, but I didn't know you liked it. I haven't seen where you ...

Oh, sorry! I was recreating a poetic scene, the part where Edward leaves Bella in Twilight. I know alot of people don't have very high opinions of twilight, so i ...

Thanks for the opinion, I'll try to make it less boring. But don't worry, there is a big point found in the face from her dream.

Wow, thanks! I'm glad you liked it. Also, Pink, the chapter in all, not counting the first part, is about ten thousand words. I thought it wise to break it ...

Deep my...whatever :lol: . Thank you for the advice, as I try to get my poems in the best condition they can be. I also think it's funny that everyon ...

Hahaha, nice, Shaard! I really like it. But still, spell check, girl, as I tell you. Also, see? I told you the story was amazing! You already have a fan!

Wow, thanks! I didn't really think so many people would approve. And actually, the fact that the story behind the poem is unknown, like how the father died, is on ...

Thanks