Published December 2, 2009
Sorry that it's boring, I'll rewrite it. Wait for it.
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Thanks for the opinion, I'll try to make it less boring. But don't worry, there is a big point found in the face from her dream.
hi. I enjoyed this but, (not to sound to mean), i didn't really get the point. All that happened was the fact that she kept eating and eating and that she had a strange dream.
I saw a few things that need editing:
Road
here you switched from 1st to 2nd person
all in all it was an okay story. Good work keep it up.