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Re: Just Another Fake
I really liked this poem; it revealed its message very well and I liked your rhyming over all. But shouldn't distracter be distractor? I'm not sure, but I think you ...
Nov 25, 2005 -
Re: Gaol
Wow, that was really well done. Your language was beautiful and I loved your 'flowe crushed under the weight of life' part... that was beautiful. I especially loved your last ...
Nov 19, 2005 -
Re: Turn Out the Lights
I really enjoyed this. The only that bothered me at all was some of your repetition, but in the sort of organization your repetition followed, it was fine. Awesome job1 ...
Sep 23, 2005 -
Re: I'll Find Yesterday
I really enjoyed this. Besides the spelling mistakes, it flowed very well and you made the words come alive. Very nice. Please keep writing
Aug 24, 2005 -
Re: Final Lullaby
I tried adding the story stanzas as well. Tell me how you like it Solemn eyes watering silently Glistening as her soft smile fills my gaze Tears well in my ...
Aug 20, 2005 -
Re: Little Girl, Not a Little Girl
Wow, this was great. I loved this, Rei! As stated above, there were a few spelling and grammatical errors that could be patched up, but other than that, I loved ...
Aug 18, 2005 -
Re: 2: The Towers (sequel to Thief of Life)
So you think I should ditch the first person and go for a writing style like Thief of Life where you don't go into characters' thoughts and then pick up ...
Aug 18, 2005 -
Re: My Perfect Life
Simple, but sweet. Very nice. I love your spacing of broken and I liked the little rhyme at the end. Nice job.
Aug 18, 2005 -
Re: Moonshot: A Poet's Letter to God
I really liked this. It has a very unique feel to it and is just great. Nice
Aug 18, 2005 -
Re: 2: The Towers (sequel to Thief of Life)
I cannot seem to get the indentations right; tab doesn't work and no matter how many spaces I indent it, it always shows up right up against the side. Is ...
Aug 17, 2005 -
Re: Leaving Works Two Ways.
Wow, that was beautiful. I love your imagery and contrasts with words... this was really awesome. Awesome job
Aug 16, 2005 -
Re: Untitled as of yet....
I really enjoyed this. Maybe it was a BIT wordy, but not too bad. I agree that an increase in imagery and sounds is good, but this is a beautiful ...
Aug 16, 2005 -
Re: Homeward Unbound
Thanks for the clarification, Rincewind
Aug 9, 2005 -
Re: A horror novel (title suggestions appreciated)
It was interesting, some parts I liked, others I didn't, but it was very well-written and the emotion came out to the reader very well. nice job
Jul 9, 2005 -
Re: heavenly graffiti
I really loved this. The only part that bugged me was the 'they's' in the first stanza, but that is just me. Good job
Jul 6, 2005