Young Writers Society

For sure. Considering what my Michael (A.K.A. Unicorn) means to me, I'll be hanging on to this for a long time.

I thought it was great. Other than the typos i think it stood a good chance. It really expresses how a fantasy writers thoughts are hard to share cause sometimes they can be considered crazy. I know mine are. A job well done in my mind. Make sure you hold onto this. you might be able to use it in the future.

This was wonderful. I really loved it, well written; very well done.

*stares at above comment* We'll just ignore him.

I loved this piece... It should have won!

What did I do during lunch and recess? Where did I go all by myself? Naria, Faerie, Avalon, Middle Earth. You name it, I've been there. Even made up a few of my own places and dreamed up this idea of meeting a unicorn.

I guess it's a girl thing, because I didn't get this. I understood the cncept, but I just didn't find it at all moving or even worthwhile. I would love to be enlightened on why many people find this piece to be wonderful and moving. Thanks.

I never did win that conest. Oh well. OSAP and help from my mom has proven enough until I get a job for the summer. And my unicorn and I are moving in at the end of the school year when we have to move out of the residence.

you and i share the same avattar.i,m obsessed with cats-really crazy about them!are u??here's what i think of your writing:
Fantastic! Touchy writing for fantasy-lovers like us.
The first bit is a bit too vague and a bit difficult to understand.
Could u please explain the part ‘bout “Underground”?
Know what? I’ll tell u a secret- I have a pet unicorn, just a seven month uni-foal. She’s really pretty and come by in the land of “Feirg” and u can meet her.
I think you should add a‘d’ to the “eserve” in the 2nd sentence.
I’m a temporary resident of MIDDLE EARTH too!!
I’m sure I’ll feel the same way you do when I’m of your age.
Let us know the contest results. Wish you luck.
**In case you were wondering where “Feirg” is, then u’ll have to wait a while. It’s a place in the fantasy novel I’m writing. It’ll take a decade to finish and another decade to get it published. We share the same dream, don’t we??**

For me, pretty good is just as good as it gets. The only higher stage is, "Awesome."

Oh yes, I have definitely found my unicorn in Mike.

I love this!

What did I do during lunch and recess? Where did I go all by myself? Naria, Faerie, Avalon, Middle Earth. You name it, I've been there. Even made up a few of my own places and dreamed up this idea of meeting a unicorn

We should think about things like careers, university, dating. But that's just not who I am. No matter how old I get, I can't let it go. And I know I'm going to meet that unicorn for real one day.

I really don't know how I feel about saying this yet, but I think I may have found my unicorn.

Is "pretty good" really the sort of phrase you want to use a exclamation point with?

Pretty good! I like it.

Even so, I'm going to point out all the tyops.

I thought I was useless, that I didn't eserve any better.

Well, now I know differently. everything...

How could I not?.

Yep. Big time nitpicking...

Short of the afore mentioned spelling errors, I really loved this. Just the overall feel. As stated by others, this was me all over! I just really felt touched by this.

We should think about things like careers, university, dating. But that's just not who I am. No matter how old I get, I can't let it go. And I know I'm going to meet that unicorn for real one day.

It is very well written I belive it has a very good chance of winning.

oh my gosh.. Rei, this is great. I think what Brad said pretty much sums everything up, too.

I'd love to see this on-stage..

Thanks for you support, everyone. I really hope I win. I also submitted the monologue in my play. But I won't know for a few more months if I win. I think the winners' issue comes out in October. The prize is $500!

Wow, this was great. I loved this, Rei! As stated above, there were a few spelling and grammatical errors that could be patched up, but other than that, I loved it. Nicely done

This was beutiful, you have a very good chance of winning, Rei. So many people can relate to this. I like how you use the same qoute at the end and beginning. Very good. Hope ya win!

This is quite good, apart from a few little mistakes. I reckon you'd have a good chance in the contest.

I entered this into a monologue-writing contest. What do you think my chances are?

there were some misspellings in that? i didn't even notice....

Very well done. It was interesting, and gave me those lines i can never make out when i watch the movie. ^__^

It touched me too

Of course I walked away. How could I now. i don't know why others like me didn't. All I knew was that I couldn't just sit there and watch while the other kids plays with their friends and I was alone.

I can completely relate to the message of the story. There are errors, but they are very minor typos and do not affect the quality of the piece. I also understand that the lack of visuals does create a problem, but it is still a strong piece.

What did I do during lunch and recess? Where did I go all by myself? Naria, Faerie, Avalon, Middle Earth. You name it, I've been there. Even made up a few of my own places and dreamed up this idea of meeting a unicorn.

Of course it wasn't written for kids. It was written for a community theatre project I was in last year. The play was about young women and the problems we face, as well as why things change for some, and not others, as well as what makes every young woman's experience different. Perhaps anything that was unclear was because this was written for the stage. Since this does lack the visuals of the performance, where you actually see my struggle with those trying to keep me in that world of pretend, it does lose something.

Grammatically, there are few spots where you messed up, but nothing that's going to devastate this piece. The work itself is obviously not directed to a younger audience, who would give up reading it half way through because of the esoteric purveyance of your point. You could be a little more clear in the presentation, as well. IF, that's what you want. Somehow, though, I doubt you were truly striving for a younger audience's eyes. Personally, I liked this. Although, I usually like your pieces, because they're almost always moving and strangely personal. Very good job.