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Very straightforward indeed. Not bad, but it seemed to just be telling a story. I wasn't sure if you were trying to tell a story or drive home a point. ...

I really liked this; it drove the point home well. I wasn't exactly fond of the last line, but the rest was great. Nice

This was really cute and good. You really made the pixies come to life... Yes, I think you should make it longer.

Thank you , Reichieru!

I agree that it was beautiful and I really liked it The only thing I noticed at first glance was that you spelled compassion compasion

I have to agree with emotion less. I think it needs more

I thought this was pretty good, but it seemed as if it should be narrative poetry 'cause it just told a story. I didn't see any point beyond the story. ...

Congratulations, Liz! This is great!

This was nice. It could be a little more poetic sounding, but hey, it's a father's day poem! Good Job!

First stanza is awesome, but I agree the rest needs a serious rewrite

Nice, short and simple. It didn't really touch me, but it was well-written The only suggestion I have is using a thesaurus to find some more colorful words

I find this very hard to read because it has no stanzas. (I'll comment and crit later 'cause I have not much time, but that is the first thing I ...

I'm going to suggest the Wheel of Time series by Robert Jordan or the long series which I forgot teh name of by Janny Wurts

I mean with Ashlee. I might have missed it, but when she ends up in that trailer, it seems very abrupt though the description in that scene was very good.

Oooh, I really liked those last two chapters you posted! You added some good humor in there. I liked it. I think it went just a tad bit too fast. ...