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This was ok... wasn't bad, but it really didn't touch me. It was sweet though All the things that make you Are all the things I see Are all the ...

I thought the books were only so-so. Some of them had some good stories, but they just didn't go deep enough and make you think enough for me. If they ...

I thought this was prettygood. Not the best, but good. I did like your first few lines though I do think you should move 'as if they were' down to ...

This was really descriptive and pretty good, but could use some work did you see the mashedpurestewed icehailsnow (simply frozen water in different so many millions of forms) mixed up ...

Wow, I don't usually like love poems, but I loved this one!!! The rhythm was beautiful and the poem flowed even though it had irregular line breaks. I really don't ...

This was okay. Here's some suggestions: Always keep your memories, Of the good times, and the bad. But most of all think happy thoughts, About the good times we have ...

I thought this was really well done. Here's a few suggestions... candles, burning, hot wax, melting, small fingers, can i kiss you again? You did a really nice job using ...

I thought this was really cool and liked your idea of someone you cherish looking up at the same sky. Very pretty. My only suggestion is that in the first ...

I personally thought this was very good. I do agree you could add some more original thoughts, but that didn't take away from the poem. The rhyming was beautiful, flowing ...

Okay... I'm going to be brutally honest here. I REALLY didn't like this! We laugh, we cry we talk about that sexy guy we bitch,we talk we laugh aloud as ...

This was pretty good. It was cool how you described your emotions in so few words. Crying blood forget Painful joy Anger Bleed till desire Shadowing my face from reality ...

I thought this was pretty good, but not great. Here's some crit/suggestions. The fire in his eyes and the evil in his heart was enough to shatter my soul and ...

Alright, I'm not going to comment on your first part though I do agree with nickelpickle with the criticism part. On to the poem... She sits at her chair, As ...

I think that Liz and Nickelpickle gave you enough criticism which I agree with, so I will give only a few suggestions. Ok, firstly, the rhyming is really forced and ...

I thought this was really nice. It was a little wordy as nietowl said, but it was good. Here's some crit The suns last rays touched the ocean, that was ...