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Hey Aedomir! Aedomir had claimed some venison, making but a sport of the game chase, and between them, new energy struck. I don't think you're a Mary-Sue, but here it ...

So I promised, so I critique! And do forgive me if I repeat what has been said before -- I have limited time online today, so I didn't read all ...

You ask, I critique! :D I climb up the three steps, my bag weighing down on my shoulders. I reach the top and pause, turning to look down the aisle ...

=) “Pull ‘em up, ‘arry!” Thompson shouted roughly . His long, gray beard was becoming soaked by the heavy rain that was pouring down into his fishing boat. He yanked ...

:D I am here to critique! [quote] [s]“Ariana why are you so sad,” her mom said as Ariana pressed against the window of the car, “this will be a new ...

Hi! :D Once upon a time there was a girl. She got perfect grades, had the perfect body and the perfect life completely. I like these as opening sentences; you ...

Hey Heather! :) The moonlight trickled through the thick, grimy atmosphere and alighted upon the cobblestone road where a young boy sat amidst the fragments of glass from a half ...

Hi lupis! :) From my perch on the dock, my eyes explore the dark emerald green water. This should be hyphenated, methinks. And maybe a comma after 'dark'? My gaze ...

Ha! Now I will have reviewed everything in your portfolio! *cackles madly* A floor-length turquoise cloak and bright purple hat on the hat stand outside the kitchen announced the presence ...

I'm here for chapter two! :D ... scratch that. I saw the under construction' thing when I came back to finish this... (it was saved as a draft). So, this ...

:D It rained the morning you were born. Ooh, really good opening line. It drew me in. Eight-year old Luke wore his racecar pajamas that morning. I don't think 'racecar' ...

Hee, this is cute. :) Nice rhythm and although I haven't read anything of Larkin's, the beat seemed kind of familiar. There wont be you, no longer me Apostrophe after ...

You requested, so here I am! :D From behind a thick wall of springy ferns and broad-leafed plants stared a pair of intense eyes. They were mine; and they were ...

gryfalcon said that they could almost hear it being read, right? I could hear it. A voice that reminds me of dusk... and candle flames, sort of: soft and quiet, ...

Hey Zills! I promised to review everything in your portfolio, so here goes! He was expected to make a speech, so when he tapped the side of his glass with ...