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zomg. That was so good! I don't have anything even remotely constructive to say...:( I really liked how you told the reader what kind of paper it was (The kindergartener's ...

Nice! ^^ Except for some typos, it's fine. You wrote: i will never say it again. i love you. those words thrown and shattered ---------- The 'i''s should be capitalized. ...

You wrote: At the time, Tonk’s hair was long and blonde, her eyes blue. There was a smattering of cute looking freckles across face. Ishtar had not noticed Tonks for ...

Wow. That was, well..really good ^^ I agree with Rigel; most rhyming poems here aren't very good, but that was spectacular. I could see the scenes you described. Unfortunately, I'm ...

That's a good metaphor, but I'm not a fan of Haiku's so I haven't got anything constructive to say...:( Except, I noticed it could be flowing better...I'm not exactly sure ...

You wrote: Others say that they are more fearsome in strength then the most powerful man that walks the earth. ------------------- It should be 'than' instead of 'then' You wrote: ...

hhmmm...I can't critique it properly or give you any constructive advice because it's so short. However, I think you should use more detail the setting; I get the feeling it ...

You know, I really enjoyed that. And you're right, it sounds better when you read it out loud. I did -my mom looked at me like I was crazy- and ...

It's short but sweet :D Since I am no expert at poetry, I have nothing constructive to say...:oops: But I really liked this line: It rushes forth as I see ...

I really have nothing constructive to say, but I loved it. It doesn't seem like something that a 15 year-old would have the brain capacity to write- most people that ...

That seems familiar :P From the old guild, *sighs* You wrote: She closed her eyes and threw back her head, slowly parting her lips and letting out a high calming ...

Kind of random, but good nonetheless. After all, random is good, right? :wink: Anyways, I noticed a few errors, here they are>> You wrote: A solum howl echoed through the ...

>>Not bad, Gwen! Before I move on to the nit-picks, I just want to clarify something; aren't you writing the rest of your book in 3rd person? (ex: She climbed ...

Prologue March 12th, 1992 A small baby boy wrapped in a soft, cotton blanket was handed to his mother. "Congradulations! It's a boy!" Exclaimed a bulky doctor. Tears swelled in ...

Nice! I haven't really got anything constructive to say...:oops: But that's because I can't think of anything that needs to be changed. I'm a fan of writing violence scenes myself, ...