Winter whispered sweet hellos,
seraphim in perfect tune
sang a chorus like a dream,
nocturne of a silver moon.
In the darkest depths of night,
ghostly crystals kissed the lawn.
Open your eyes to frosted glass
and behold an icy dawn.
Nestled somewhere warm and dry,
I'll be safe from howling winds,
encased in a soft cocoon
where numbness ends and love begins.
Tempests take over the night,
and swallow the helpless day.
Blizzards fuse the land and sky,
arctic white to muted gray.
Evanescent rays of gold,
cherished patches of sunlight
cascade to the bedroom floor,
envying Polaris burning bright.
Rime speaks stories as it drips,
telling tales of its short life.
Icicles all whisper low
of the winter's love and strife.
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The imagery was very good in this, along with the rhythm and rhyme. I have to say I've always seen acrostics just simply being one line per letter, so it was nice to see it per stanza instead. Again very good
This poem... wow, it's beautiful. You've probably heard it a few times already, but this describes Winter well. The stanzas per letter sound great. I apologise for the lack of helpful critiquing, I just thought I'd mention that I love the way you did this poem.
you did an awesome job.
i loved the discription. normally to much isnt good, but in your case, it turned out beautiful. i personally dont like winter, ( i live in it). you made it sound like a beautiful season.
i should save this, so when winter gets bad all i have to do is pull out your poem , close my eyes and pretend it is beautiful.
i look forward to reading more of your writings.
kim
I like this poem. Since I live in Hawaii, I don't get much of the "Winter" feeling, but could feeling winter while reading this poem.
-bobiscool134
Wow.
That was, well..really good ^^
I agree with Rigel; most rhyming poems here aren't very good, but that was spectacular. I could see the scenes you described. Unfortunately, I'm no expert with poetry, so I won't be able to provide any useful feedback
But, yeah. That was excellent!
That was wonderful. There aren't too many good rhyming poems here, simply because so few people are able to write them. It wasn't cluttered, and you made the structure work for you instead of bending to the structure.
That the imagery was out of this world goes without saying.
I really like that. It paints a really nice picture in my head. Good job!
~ Gwen