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I agree with Cade on the matters of Description and Diction. 'Females' does bring to mind diagrams and such. 'Ladies' sounds...weird. And 'Girls' sounds too...I don't know. 'Women' is just ...

Wow, that was so cool. 8) I agree with twit--this was deep. Or abstract. I dunno. Same thing, really. Or they are to poor, decrepit souls like me anyways. Well, ...

Oh wow! Azila, I am sooo jealous. Meh. Your descriptions are vivid and powerful, and I really get drawn into the story. You should be published. Seriously. Anyways, everything has ...

I loved this! It was so much better than your 'Another School day' poem--the rhyming here doesn't seem forced, and it's just, as Motherflippinflapjacks said, unique. Well, MFFJ (Motherflippinflapjacks

this poem i wrote isn't very good how could i improve it You could could start by being literate! You know, using capitals at the start of your sentences, capitalizing ...

I promised to review this, didn't I? :twisted: But it's no chore. I've been wanting to read this since you told me you put it up! A few short seconds ...

This sounds interesting! That’s bad for your cubicles. Jim couldn't lose his cubicles now! He was so young! Cubicles? Aren't those like, stalls in a bathroom? Weird. Ahhh...did you mean ...

Fan! You're back! :D Oh wow, it's been so long since I've talked to you! And guess what? I learned how to do a real review! With quotes 'n all ...

Mwuaha, I have come to review your other written works. *rubs hands together* :twsited: Back in Metropolis Jason was riding in the car home with his father. I think there ...

That was awesome! Usually I dislike Haiku's, but that was totally cool. I loved the way you described the swells/clouds. Also, the part about waiting for fury was pwnful--like waiting ...

That was pretty good! I have no nit-picks, because the grammar was flawless and it flowed pretty well. However, it was very, very cliched. Everyone has learned to associate black ...

Walkin in da hall with a chip on my shoulder Ok then... I'm guessing you meant to use all the 'da' and 'walkin' and all, but I don't really like ...

The soft sand that comforts me like a soft blanket against my skin on the beach. I don't like how you used 'soft' twice...maybe try something like this: The soft ...

One fights for love One loves to fight Neither surely are right. I think it should be: Surely neither one is right. And when all those loved parish, one comes ...

I promise you I'll give this an in-depth critique as soon as I can, but I have to get off now. :( Reviewing your work is always so fun! :wink: