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Echo to Brad up there. >.< You have a very basic skeleton of a poem here. You have emotion - I can see taht you just blurted this out without ...

Everyone already mentioned it all, so I don't have anything to say, really. I liked this piece; it was beautiful in it's simplicity. The line breaks were kind of irksome, ...

I agree with tose 'uns in dark green up there. Poetry can be short - but then you need to condense your ideas into a couple sentences while still keeping ...

Firstly, no double posting and/or bumping up your own thread. ^_~ But now, onto your poem. I look up at the sky above me Above the ceiling of water Then ...

The hrsh wind was at my back and racing past my ears blocking all sound around me. There's an A in harsh. ^_^ Ihad no choice now for if I ...

Mad... Don't feel like this. Seriously. Gwen didn't mean to make you depressed...:cry: Try to get over it; there are girls at your school, right? Just as there are guys ...

Forgive me for denying all my silent judgment cries Huh? It may just be me, but that doesn't seem to make sense. But poetry doesn't have to make sense, right? ...

Yeah, there was part 'Buster the amazing Kleenex Horfer dog' Weird, I know. :wink: Anyways, I'm glad you put this up! :) But we weren't that young when we wrote ...

Squee! I really like this. :) It's pleasant and easy to understand, yet complex at the same time. Very poignant. I really can't think of anything that you could improve ...

Wow, this is very powerful. And so, so true. You really hit hard with this poem. I actually think was very poetic. I think good poetry should be full of ...

I shall indeed enjoy your sorrows. :twisted: Well, the blog would be the place for this. But narf, from what you've told me, he likes you now, so hoorah! Anyways. ...

Ah! Before I review this, I would suggest separating it into more manageable paragraphs. At the moment it's a solid wall of text and that looks rather...discouraging. If you do ...

Echo to Audy up there. :wink: I agree that you should switch up the rhyming, but otherwise, this was neat. It's very elegant in an emotional way, but I do ...

This is kind of random, but I like it. The characters are already well-developed but I think you should add more imagery and setting description. You also do much more ...

I wasn't originally going to review this because I'd have absolutely nothing to say, but the lines kept ringing through my head on my way back from school, so... Anyways. ...