Wiggy

Cute poem, but really nothing special that grabbed me. It sounded just like a description of a guinea pig, which can easily be written about in prose. Maybe interweave some ...

Hehe Snoink *Grif and Phoenix and Dusky sitting in a tree*...jk jk. :P That was great! Keep it coming Grif! :D Wiggy ;)

That's awesome trop! I'll pray for her soul and her family and her friends, especially you. I'm so happy that you wrote that, and I'm sure that she is smiling ...

I really liked this clover! I totally don't have time to do a long crit right now, but I'll try to get one for ya by the end of this ...

What gummy said. And nice job Pros! I'll have to look out for more of your poetry! :D Wiggy ;)

Sorry Grif-this was done at 1 in the morning last night and I didn't have a chance to do a full length crit...besides I've got sooo much other work to ...

That is about the most creative exercise in poetry I've heard of! And you did an excellent job of choosing passages in the book to form a well-thought, well-formed, and ...

Very nice poem! I liked how each line increased one syllable. I don't believe I've ever seen that type of poem before. And you did a very nice job of ...

First of all, kudos to you. This was one of the best poems I've ever read. *applauds* It was touching, moving, simple, heartfelt, deep. Only one change I would make: ...

Nice start, but nothing special. Guy wants girl, gets her, loses her deal. Also, please work on your grammar. This story was very hard to get through, and I highly ...

Cameron made some excellent suggestions-just work on placing of words, which can be the critical deliverance for a poem. Very nice attempt. I'd like to hear more of it! Wiggy ...

So if this is based on you, am I correct that you taught in Africa? That is major cool that you did (if you did). What was it like? And ...

I normally capitalize Redcoats lol. And fishr, after I crit DD's story, yours is next on the list...I just hate having to do school! Ah, to be free from the ...

Fantastic!!!! Only one thing: that stems from wounds that never felt the blow. I'd break it like this: that stems from wounds that never felt the blow. Great job! :D

Hmm...very nice poem (language choice was excellent), but I think that the first stanza is off beat from the rest of the poem. Every other poem has the first-third, second-fourth ...