Great poem! I love butterflies too. 
They've been everywhere recently!
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My pathetic attempt at making a little butterfly thingie... *shrug* 
This was an interesting project I had to do in my English class. We had to read Sound of Thunder by Ray Bradbury, and then compose a poem solely from passages of the story. This was written by me and my friend. I'd highly suggest trying this kind of poetry--it's fun.
Perhaps Europe is forever a dark forest. . .
The jungle is the whole world-
For ever and ever
Full of twittering, rustling, murmurs and sighs.
Out of the mist came a butterfly
It moved into the sunlit arena
Only a soft breath, a whisper
It floats six inches above the ground
An aurora that flickers-
Now orange, now silver, now blue!
”Not a little thing like that! Not a butterfly!”
An exquisite thing-
A small thing that could upset balances
Billions of life forms thrown into chaos
Step on a butterfly, and you leave your print like a Grand Canyon across Eternity
Great poem! I love butterflies too. They've been everywhere recently!
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My pathetic attempt at making a little butterfly thingie... *shrug*
Thanks! It was really fun to do. I highly suggest it to anyone--especially someone like me who otherwise suffers in poetry writing.
That is about the most creative exercise in poetry I've heard of! And you did an excellent job of choosing passages in the book to form a well-thought, well-formed, and simply beautiful poem. I love butterflies too.
I liked the detailed descriptions and the images of colour the poem had. it keeps the reader gripped also by the sounds described. Good piece of a writing.
I don't know if she'll be fun. She seems rather mean so far. Oh well, it was a good project, and a useful writing activity, I think. Thanks for you comment.
Oh! Fun thing to do!
A small thing that could upset balances
Billions of life forms thrown into chaos
Maybe you can add a couple of other snippets of line?
Still, nice.... Your teacher sounds fun.
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