Whatsarahsaid

I like it but the rhyme scheme seems a little simple. I do like the alliteration on the first line and the general message of the poem, the only thing ...

I really like this, some great imagery. Not sure if I really understand the meaning, I'm stuck on "Like Deborah before the rain". This is what I think it means; ...

I've read romeo and J last year and have just finished Macbeth in English class. I prefer Macbeth because it's grittier and nastier language.

I read it when I was 9 and have read it twice since then. It makes me cry every time. Has anyone read milkweed by jerry spinelli? That's heartbreaking.

I loved of Mice and Men, it was so upsetting at the end though. I started grapes of wrath but never finished it, not because I didn't enjoy it I ...

I think it's really sweet, he sounds quite a character! :D

Thank you all, it was inspired by Edward Scissorhands.

"The grass is always greener on the other side" is what I was trying to say lol

That's really clever! Brilliant! Good luck to you!

Gosh. That's really good, I really identify with Melquanna, the way she always wanted to be someone else.

Very tragic and gorgeous description. (I can't believe I just used that word! However it does sum it up) :) This writing is almost Gothic!

A cute poem. Perhaps you could experiment with more complex verses and vocabulary. You have a nice style, but that's what I think you should do to develop as a ...

The first stanza was mediocre but you caught me on the second, such simple imagery really beautifully written. If I had the same images in my mind, I wouldn't be ...

The rhyming part is very simple, but effective. I like the way complex verses were balanced with such a simple rhyming scheme. Nice imagery too.

I like this, its different. I think it should be under alternative poetry. Very simple, but is full of imagery. I like the repitition.