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Re: Fantastical Book 1: The Mirror (Chapter Two)
Howdy ho and all that jazz! Firstly, I'm sorry for taking this long to harken to this here chapter of yours. I assure you it isn't because I was uninterested; ...
Oct 29, 2013 -
Re: Fantastical Book 1: The Mirror (Chapter One)
Heya, not quite the morning anymore, but here none-the-less to give my few cents. I'm assuming Jess here is our Earthly protagonist, soon to discover the dimension-travelers, what with the ...
Oct 10, 2013 -
Re: Days of Gold Gone By: Episode One.
Now this, this is interesting. Heya, Life here, if not to give much general critique, at least to fix up some stylistic stuff-a-ma-joogers. Why I say this is because I ...
Oct 9, 2013 -
Re: Fantastical Book 1: The Mirror (Prologue)
Heya, Life here for a quick review! This was well written. You have a strong voice in your narration, backed with a good handling of the words themselves. I've always ...
Sep 25, 2013 -
Re: The Dawn of Winter (Remastered)
Heya, Life here to drop a review. :) You did a pretty good job setting up the start of a story. I like the interactions between the characters, befitting their ...
Sep 25, 2013 -
Re: Die With Me
Heya! Life here to polish his reviewing teeth after a longer than usual break. I like this. I could feel the melancholy in between the lines, in the pauses between ...
Sep 20, 2013 -
Re: The Year of the Scorpio - Chapter 1
Heya, once again! Saw your post on my wall and had to come check it out. I'm glad I did. I'd like to congratulate you on your seriously good dialogue, ...
Mar 27, 2013 -
Re: The Year of the Scorpio - Prologue
Heya! I think this works well as a prologue - it gives us the background, gives us an objective and introduces the main character. I also liked the quirk with ...
Mar 26, 2013 -
Re: Hate Me
Heya, I've got a suggestion, is all. As it stands now, this is not really a poem. It's a blunt statement of an emotion, which, granted, can work as a ...
Mar 5, 2013 -
Re: The Disappearance: Chapter 1
Heya! I'd like to start by saying that I love your enthusiasm. Really makes a hermit like me look bad. :D Oh, and welcome to YWS! Hope you enjoy your ...
Mar 4, 2013 -
Re: Time
Heya, just a quick flash of input from me. First off, I really liked the idea of this poem and the imagery you drew together was much to my liking. ...
Mar 4, 2013 -
Re: In The End
Heya, here to review and all that shazaam. Firstly and foremost, a warm welcome to our odd ranks! May you find your stay pleasant. ^^ The idea, though extremely cliché, ...
Mar 1, 2013 -
Re: Deleted
Heya, good to see newer members with such solid form in their writing. ^^ Your confidence as a writer shines through your sentence structure and choice of words. The rather ...
Mar 1, 2013 -
Re: Metal Heart
Heya, Life here to give my two cents! I like the idea of robots and human feelings as a topic. In my mind, it gives a lot of space in ...
Dec 19, 2012 -
Re: empirical
I always refrain from commenting on your works, because I can't find much at all to criticize in them and feel as if I can only contribute an empty comment. ...
Dec 19, 2012
