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Re: You
This is Yams here for a review! There aren't any stanzas in this poem which could've been because of the formatting of the Publishing Center. It'd be nice if you ...
Jun 8, 2016 -
Re: The Nose Man
This is Yams here for a review! First, let me say, I like this poem. Okay now I can get onto my issues with it. I felt like the rhyming ...
Jun 6, 2016 -
Re: A Haiku About Butts
Well this happened. Since this probably won't get reviewed since people won't know what to think about it, I will. I know it's supposed to be funny, but I didn't ...
Jun 4, 2016 -
Re: Wailing Apologies for the Unforgiving Dead
This is Yams here for a review! I didn't have too many problems with the structure and thought it was nice to have it neat like this. The flow was ...
Jun 3, 2016 -
Re: Dad
This is Yams here for a review! There are no stanzas in this poem, which makes it difficult on the eyes to read and it could be fixed by breaking ...
Jun 2, 2016 -
Re: Seventh Crown XIX
This is Yams here for a review! "Cody, wake up, man!" Skye slapper Cody through the face to wake him up. Cage kneeled down and touched Cody's forehead. I think ...
May 29, 2016 -
Re: Chapter 13- New friendship
This is Yams here for a review! I haven't read any of the other chapters but I'll try and help as best I can! Who names their kid Alchemy? But ...
May 29, 2016 -
Re: Avery Trent - Chapter 15 (Dreams and Nightmares)
This is WillyWonka here for a review! I've never read or reviewed a chapter of Avery Trent, but I'll try and help you as much as possible! This might be ...
May 29, 2016 -
Re: Broken Home
This is Yams here for a review! First off, there isn't really much structure in this poem. There are no stanzas in it, which would be helpful. Where is the ...
May 29, 2016 -
Re: Taking A Nap. Yawn 1 (First Draft)
This is Yams here for a review! "Now, now, darling, it's quite the woeful sight to watch you struggle at those chains so adamantly. It hurts to watch- really it ...
May 29, 2016 -
Re: The Quest for Fire Book Two ~ Frozen Past Chapter 13
This is Yams here for a third review! I don't really get how Zoltar is so calm about dying in less than a week? It just doesn't seem very believable ...
May 29, 2016 -
Re: The Quest for Fire Book Two ~ Frozen Past Chapter 12
This is Yams here for another chapter! I feel like you did it right when you make Zoltar still kind of shocked and thinking about this in this chapter. I'm ...
May 29, 2016 -
Re: The Quest for Fire Book Two ~ Frozen Past Chapter 11
I haven't read the other chapters of this so I may not be able to help fully, but this is Yams here for a review! I felt like I couldn't ...
May 29, 2016 -
Re: Shorter Adventures Into Time: Supplemental Diary Entry 1
Yams here for a review! In the first three paragraphs it feels kind of weird that the narrator is just telling us the whole beginning of it instead of showing ...
May 29, 2016 -
Re: Cavity
Yams here for a review! There are no stanzas in this and I kind of thought there could've been easier to read and neater if you put a break in ...
May 29, 2016