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Re: Chicago Chapter 12
This is Yams here for a review on Review Day! I didn't love the beginning of this chapter as it's just the main character fantasizing about his girlfriend and overall ...
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Re: 4. Friendship Depletion
This is Yams here for a review on Review Day! It's kind of confusing when the narrator just starts talking about school if you haven't read the previous chapters. Maybe ...
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Re: How the Marigold Lost It's Sun: Ch 3
This is Yams here for a review on Review Day! “If you really liked me, Alexander Darius Kane, you would freaking know not to show up here with that bunch ...
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Re: 14. Honesty
This is Yams here for a review on Review Day! The beginning was kind of confusing as the question was in the last chapter. For people coming into this story ...
Jun 26, 2016 -
Re: Empty
This is Yams here for a review on Review Day! Wasn't going to let this sit around in the Green Room for so long, so here we go. This piece ...
Jun 26, 2016 -
Re: bird
This is Yams here for a review on Review Day! He followed her into the streets and was begging for her to come back, to stay inside the house, “Please ...
Jun 26, 2016 -
Re: Watching (CH1)
This is Yams here to review on Review Day! The moon’s beam sliced through the sky like a silver spear and put spotlight on the grinning faces below. Enclosed within ...
Jun 26, 2016 -
Re: Evanescent part 3
This is Yams here for a review on Review Day! The whole style that it's written is is weird. You switch between first and third, though you need to pick ...
Jun 26, 2016 -
Re: The Goose and the Gander [Prologue]
This is Yams here for a review on Review Day! Why is Euphie's nickname Gander? Will we learn this later in the story? Just some questions I had throughout the ...
Jun 26, 2016 -
Re: Cheap Thrills
This is Yams here for a review on Review Day! We live behind bricks and pretty little machines, where dirty faces are wiped clean, and happiness is measured by the ...
Jun 26, 2016 -
Re: Heartbeat Academy: Chapter 41
This is Yams here for a review on Review Day! In the beginning of the chapter there's a lot of "..." which gets kind of annoying and distracting when you ...
Jun 26, 2016 -
Re: Fallen Angel Pt. 2
This is Yams here for a review on Review Day! When I opened the door bells rang above my head and for a fraction of a second I put a ...
Jun 26, 2016 -
Re: j - 3
This is Yams here for a review on Review Day! With my whining about how it was so uneven with descriptions and dialogue in the last one, this one is ...
Jun 26, 2016 -
Re: Heartbeat Academy: Chapter 39
This is Yams here for a review on Review Day! “Where did Dr. Pam go?” I asked Dr. Sembagh as he held his stethoscope to my chest in his office. ...
Jun 26, 2016 -
Re: j - 2
This is Yams here for a review on Review Day! The hustle and bustle of the city always amazed me. How could so many people deal with such a hurried ...
Jun 26, 2016