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Re: Just a Drop
This is Kaos for a review! In one teardrop, you lose your sense of self. In one teardrop, your heart left me a key. In one teardrop, you take that ...
Nov 5, 2016 -
Re: Sunshine filled Cold Days
This is Kaos here for a review. So you have this simple idea here that's kind of based off the weather, and that's the most I got out of this ...
Nov 5, 2016 -
Re: Depression
This is Kaos here for a review. Poems in this style often get lost to a lot of monologue, and that's what I feel happened here. You were going for ...
Oct 30, 2016 -
Re: that cold december morning.
This is Kaos here for a review! This poem feels more narrative-like to me though you do keep a poetic feel to it. I You do a lot of repeating ...
Oct 30, 2016 -
Re: A Journey That Never Ends...
This is Kaos here for a review! As I sit there, tolerating all those taunts said to me, I wonder is this what I really am? This first line didn't ...
Oct 30, 2016 -
Re: Eternal internal
This is Kaos here for a review! The first thing I noticed is that you chose to rhyme in some parts of the poem, or tried to. Not all of ...
Oct 30, 2016 -
Re: Sleep is for the Weak
This is Kaos here for a review! The first thing that I noticed about this poem is that you rhyme but you don't seemingly have a pattern for it. If ...
Oct 30, 2016 -
Re: I Have Seen the Red Leaves Fall
This is Kaos here for a review! I have seen the red leaves fall Like blood seeping into a battleground Twirling, then drifting down As if they’ve been sown there. ...
Oct 30, 2016 -
Re: bAck Bone of a maN
This is Kaos here for a review! One of the first things that I noticed is how long the line runs on, and I don't know if you did that ...
Oct 30, 2016 -
Re: The Line Between.
This is Kaos here for a review! I grind my tongue along my jaw, Feeling the jagged canines, the crushing molars, This is keratin. Here in the start of the ...
Oct 30, 2016 -
Re: not your masterpiece
This is Kaos here for a review! he was flesh and bones came together with the aid of life energy. These first to lines are kind of awkward, specifically the ...
Oct 30, 2016 -
Re: Women's Arm Wrestling Champion Of The World, Ernest Hemingway!
This is Kaos here for a review! Idle hands covered in acrylic paint will paint a dog riding a skateboard in the school parking lot, the only light source are ...
Oct 30, 2016 -
Re: The Wasteland Girl
This is Kaos here for a review! I felt like that this could be potentially good, but I had mixed feelings on what was here. It almost felt like satire ...
Oct 30, 2016 -
Re: When the Wood Grain Danced
This is Kaos here for a review! She swallowed down the liquid, feeling it burn in her gut, all the way down to her soul. She was tired... not the ...
Oct 30, 2016 -
Re: Transcendence
This is Kaos here for a review on Review Day! The first thing that I noticed about this poem was your choice to capitalize some of the words like "Life" ...
Oct 30, 2016