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Re: call me the lovely vendor
This is Kaos here for a review! I like the idea and the coins that the poem plays with here, and that's one of the strengths that you had with ...
Dec 7, 2016 -
Re: Zonaisha
This is Kaos here for a review! The first thing that I noticed here were the emotion words that you used. I'm not one to really like the usage of ...
Dec 7, 2016 -
Re: Monster Under my Bed
This is Kaos here for a review! The rhyming is the first thing that I noticed in this poem and it some parts, I actually liked it, which is rare. ...
Dec 6, 2016 -
Re: Inferno
This is Kaos here for a review! So this poem was interesting. I wasn't really into the first stanza because of its vagueness and that it doesn't really do anything ...
Dec 6, 2016 -
Re: kerosene
This is Kaos here to review! You could have picked a different title you cheat D:< I wanted more elaboration, specifically with the theme of the poem and the last ...
Dec 6, 2016 -
Re: we hung bottles.
This is Kaos here for a review! So this is different from your usual style in a way, and I don't think I liked this poem as much as your ...
Dec 5, 2016 -
Re: for the sake of art
This is Kaos here for a review! So you play with the idea of white space here, which is something that I'm particularly fond of but I have mixed feelings ...
Dec 5, 2016 -
Re: Deleted 73
This is Kaos here for a review! You did it again. The "packed bed" phrasing feels a little awkward, but that's something that's minor. Another thing that I wanted to ...
Dec 5, 2016 -
Re: Alone for Christmas
This is Kaos here for a review! Interesting poem, though I don't really think you captured what you were trying to get across with the title completely with me. I ...
Dec 5, 2016 -
Re: out of place.
This is Kaos here for a review! So this is interesting. The first line reminded me of a song that also took a spin on the line, "My body is ...
Dec 4, 2016 -
Re: It Eats My Heart Away
This is Kaos here for a review! The first thing that I noticed here was the rhyme and my opinion on it is that it didn't really need to be ...
Dec 4, 2016 -
Re: [white clasped hands]
This is Kaos here for a review! There's a lack of punctuation in this poem which is something that interests me in your choice to do this, not necessarily in ...
Dec 4, 2016 -
Re: I'm a slave(Edited)
This is Kaos here for a review! So I see this is the edited version of your other work, and I have to say, it's a lot improved. I like ...
Dec 3, 2016 -
Re: coffee
This is Kaos here for a review. I liked this one a lot better than your work "honeymoon", and I'll tell you why now. This is something that has a ...
Dec 3, 2016 -
Re: Travis
This is Kaos here for a review! So, I've been seeing these poems popping up from you and wanted to take a shot at one of them because I usually ...
Dec 3, 2016