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I have edited it a little...for the first time since it was posted. Charcoal spheres....totally gone now. Better? Haha.

I also liked the idea here. Also agree that it doesn't exactly read like poetry. But I liked the last few lines the best. May be out of place a ...

You said it yourself: "I sent this letter ". This is a letter, not a poem. Try using some actual poetic elements when you may give you something worthwhile. Good ...

Well, I am not fond of all. I feel they lack meaning. So, as far as my haiku expertise goes...this is good. But I don't like the last doesn't make ...

If you knew before hand it wasn't very good and you knew why, then why did you post it? Please only post work that you are serious about on here. ...

I've just read The Inferno. Loveee. Seriously. Best thing I ever read in highschool. Definitely worth the Saturday spent on it! Oh, and my level? Eighth. Haha. Meg

I own On Beauty, but I haven't gotten around to reading it yet. Have you finished?

I would change the name of it could be seen as stolen or something from the book Pretty Little Dirty by Amanda Boyden. Just a little suggestion, although I don't ...

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Well, I liked the woe is me line too, it is also mocking--they use it in films now at mocary material. They are equals! haha

My first thought on 'emerald blades' was a girl laying on a bed of swords...and I have no idea why haha.

Haha I thought it was fun to stick a random 'Thee' in there! That was awesome, the sarcasm beyond the awesome. Nice! :D Meg

This is by far better than anything you have posted. But the imagery is not appealing, the repetition is too much for a poem with so many short stanzas...there is ...

krystalstars, Please read the rules on posting poetry... Thanks.

lexy, Please read the rules on posting poetry... Thanks.